Suspended in time

https://suno.com/song/dfbbb475-fdfe-484e-8be1-cea02799b42a

I got the idea for this after listening to white room by cream..(which was written by a poet, just sayin..) I like the verse about the train station.


[Verse 1]

Sounds of mechanical ticks under neon lights

An essence battles and the warrior's fight

Helplessly watching as confidence turns despair

Another episode as disappointment fills the air


[Verse 2]

I'm chained to a chair as white walls surround

Closing me in once hope no longer found

A single piece of paper I hold to my heart

Finding inner strength to let her soul depart


[Chorus]

Suspended in time and bright colors fade,

Where darks and lights become one shade.

As black curtains of time are slowly drawn

Once heartbeats melts shadows now gone


[Verse 3]

Into barren shallow lakes tears flow deep

And the body transforms itself final sleep

Staring out the window at nothing at all

True finality comes into blackness falls


[Verse 4]

Standing barefoot the platform is cold

The train slowly leave memories I hold

Searching deep inside for words to say

Never heard heavily on my heart weighs


[Outro]

Suspended in time and bright colors fade,

Where darks and lights become one shade.

The black curtains drawn for a final time

Distant misty church bells softly chime

Comments

  • That's very pretty and well written man

  • @ElvisNash , thanks elvis.. really appreciate it.. as close to psychedelic as I could get.

  •  psychedelic is kinda dated , sounds pretty fresh with the sitar

  • @ElvisNash - at my age almost all music is dated :) yes, the sitar add a nice flavor

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside

    Well there's a nice New Year treat, two outstanding offerings in one hit.

    So many good things about this piece, again beautiful lyrics.

    Good use of alternative structure, big fan of that!

    Music was excellent for the piece, sitar a refreshing change of instruments.

    Overall, brilliant song, well done.

    Sid

  • ElvisNash
    ElvisNash Calif
    edited January 2025

    the spiders pick up what's current if you prompt it to , The machines scrap every lick out there . Age is something you think about when you're not busy . Numbers are useless unless it involves the Circle Of Fifths. Then you don't think about if your 16 years old or 90 . Life mirrors the Aeolian mode . But we use the Ionian mode to forget.

  • @ElvisNash - very profound and so very true :)

  • @sidshovel - thanks Sid.. really appreciate it.. I agree, the sitar really makes the song..

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