Suspended in time
https://suno.com/song/dfbbb475-fdfe-484e-8be1-cea02799b42a
I got the idea for this after listening to white room by cream..(which was written by a poet, just sayin..) I like the verse about the train station.
[Verse 1]
Sounds of mechanical ticks under neon lights
An essence battles and the warrior's fight
Helplessly watching as confidence turns despair
Another episode as disappointment fills the air
[Verse 2]
I'm chained to a chair as white walls surround
Closing me in once hope no longer found
A single piece of paper I hold to my heart
Finding inner strength to let her soul depart
[Chorus]
Suspended in time and bright colors fade,
Where darks and lights become one shade.
As black curtains of time are slowly drawn
Once heartbeats melts shadows now gone
[Verse 3]
Into barren shallow lakes tears flow deep
And the body transforms itself final sleep
Staring out the window at nothing at all
True finality comes into blackness falls
[Verse 4]
Standing barefoot the platform is cold
The train slowly leave memories I hold
Searching deep inside for words to say
Never heard heavily on my heart weighs
[Outro]
Suspended in time and bright colors fade,
Where darks and lights become one shade.
The black curtains drawn for a final time
Distant misty church bells softly chime
Comments
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That's very pretty and well written man
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@ElvisNash , thanks elvis.. really appreciate it.. as close to psychedelic as I could get.
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psychedelic is kinda dated , sounds pretty fresh with the sitar
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@ElvisNash - at my age almost all music is dated :) yes, the sitar add a nice flavor
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Well there's a nice New Year treat, two outstanding offerings in one hit.
So many good things about this piece, again beautiful lyrics.
Good use of alternative structure, big fan of that!
Music was excellent for the piece, sitar a refreshing change of instruments.
Overall, brilliant song, well done.
Sid
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the spiders pick up what's current if you prompt it to , The machines scrap every lick out there . Age is something you think about when you're not busy . Numbers are useless unless it involves the Circle Of Fifths. Then you don't think about if your 16 years old or 90 . Life mirrors the Aeolian mode . But we use the Ionian mode to forget.
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@ElvisNash - very profound and so very true :)
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@sidshovel - thanks Sid.. really appreciate it.. I agree, the sitar really makes the song..
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