Simple…but beautiful
I’ll give you some lyrics of a great song by my favorite band to show what I mean. I’d like to learn how something like that can be written…
Thanks for your ideas and input.
RED SHOES
Put on the red shoes that you want to.
Put on the red shoes that you like.
Put on the red shoes that you've never worn before.
Put on the red shoes, put on the red shoes that you like.
Put on the red dress that you want to.
Put on the red dress that you like.
Put on the red dress that you've never worn before.
Put on the red dress, put on the red dress that you like.
Everybody's dreaming and so am I
Put on the red shoes that you want to.
Put on the red shoes that you like.
Put on the red shoes that you've never worn before.
Put on the red shoes, put on the red shoes that you like.
I'll take you tonight where you want to.
And dance with you all night long.
I need you more then I've ever needed someone.
Put on the red shoes,
Put on the red dress that you like.
Everybody's dreaming and so am I
Everybody's dreaming and so am I
Put on the red shoes that you want to.
Put on the red shoes that you like.
Put on the red shoes that you've never worn before.
Put on the red shoes, put on the red dress that you like.
Copyrighted: John Kelly/kellfam
Comments
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Not sure I have a good answer here. This isn't my style of writing, and this song doesn't speak to me the way the way it does to you.
Music will always be important, and the less is said in the lyric, the more will fall onto the music to convey mood and emotion.
Some sort of strong visual element is likely to help. Here we have the red shoes and red dress which are both vivid and easy to imagine. And they fit with going out dancing, so it all ties together.
Repetition with variation is always good advice, and that's on clear display here. Without the variation between red shoes and red dress it might have been too much.
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Thanks Owen. I don’t know but if you hear red shoes, mhh it’s a very special song if you listen to it, so I guess it’s more about the composition0
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There is absolutely no reason that the lyrics you posted here couldn't become a great song WITH THE RIGHT MUSICAL accompaniment. The hard part (of course) is finding the perfect music. THAT is what makes it art.
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@RainbowKeeper Dummy me. I didn't read your introduction to the lyric completely before I read the lyric and thought you wrote it. I love the repetitiveness. I find it to be refreshing.
And to answer your question: what makes a simple song as such or any song great for that matter is the singer's HEART. That's how I get by. I'm not a singer nor a guitar player. If one of my songs touches someone, it's usually due to my heart not only in the lyric but in the singing of the song. I just looked up the song on YouTube. It is NOT the melody I got out of the lyric. I was feeling more bluegrass . . .
I agree, Rainbow, wonderful SIMPLE song! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hAlpjOkCWCE
NOW, it's YOUR turn to write YOUR wonderful-simple song! You now, know how it's done!!
PS: you probably already know this but one of the reasons Red Shoes works is because of the word 'red'. Color songs such as Yellow Submarine and so many others work simply because COLOR SONGS work! And other words in hooks/titles which work are heart, night, home, IF, names of places such as Sweet Home Alabama, women's names and the list goes on....and let's not leave out number songs! 😉
Renee
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