Imagined Moments
Hey all. Yesterday I posted the lyrics for the first song I've attempted to write and spent the last day taking all the feedback you provided. I used Suno and got some vocals and instrumentals for the tweaked song and wanted to know what you thought of it when you can actually hear it, rather than read it:
https://suno.com/song/ec3996e8-e017-43b7-9232-66b061af605c
Lyrics:
[Verse 1]
Every time I see your smile
It brightens up my day
I pray to God, every night
That these feelings, go away
[Verse 2]
You make me laugh, with every joke
I wonder if you know
That every time I look at you
I want to share what's in my soul
[Chorus 1]
I don't know why, you make me feel this way
Spent too much time, thinking of what to say
I wish I hadn't been so afraid
To tell you what I feel inside and now my chance has gone away
[Verse 3]
I pictured us, having drinks together
Just talking and having fun
But my anxious mind and trepidation
Stop us seeing what we'd become
[Verse 4]
I've pictured us flying off to see
The world's wonders, just you and me
But my fear of revealing what's inside
Cost me that chance until the day I die
[Chorus 2]
I don't know why, you make me feel this way
Spent too much time, thinking of what to say
I wish that I, hadn't been so afraid
To tell you what I feel inside and now my chance has gone away
[Bridge]
These thoughts of you keep me up at night
Memories we'll never make
Feelings I cannot shake
But it was all my fault, my mistake
[Chorus 3]
I don't know why, you make me feel this way
Spent too much time, thinking of what to say
I wish that I, hadn't been so afraid
To tell you what I feel inside and now my chance has gone away
[Chorus 4]
I don't know why, you make me feel this way
Spent too much time, thinking of what to say
I wish that I, hadn't been so afraid
To tell you what I feel inside and now my chance has gone away
Comments
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Can you explain please.... 'I got some vocals and instrumentals'?
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Of course. I don't have access to any instruments at the minute because i'm at university and I don't sing but wanted to hear how it sounds. I used Suno (It's an AI music thing) to get the vocals and the music for the song for now just so the song could be heard rather than just read. I used it a good bit to find something that fit the melodies and tone of the song that I had in mind beforehand.
All the lyrics are my own, but the vocals and music is AI generated until I find time to record some music for it myself
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I do like what AI made out of it0
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I agree. Took about 40 different iterations to find something that provided the melodies, for the most part, that I had in mind. Obviously this is just a "For now" thing until I can make something of it myself but at least I know it doesn't sound like a jumbled mess of words
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It's amazing what the AI music sites can do. And I imagine it's wonderful to hear your lyrics set to music, even if it's not quite what you have in your head. You joined a songwriting site after all, not a poetry one!
AI generated music is fine on the site, provided you wrote the lyric (which you did) and you mark it as being AI generated (you mentioned Suno, but it might be helpful to explicitly say AI generated in there). Not everyone likes AI generated music, so it's good to have it clearly labelled, then people can listen or not as they feel inclined.
It's a bit hard to give any useful feedback on AI generated music as you're not directly in control of it. I can't suggest you increase the level of the bass, or add a synth at a certain point because those aren't things that you control. I will say that the music you chose seems like a good fit for the mood of the lyric.
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