🅰️Back home to me
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Another early piece revisited and rejigged.
[intro]
[verse 1]
Unlike a critic, you know what you're talkin' about
don't leave false opinions, or spread lies or doubts.
I love everythin' about you, your body and that mind,
Some people just can't see you, are they really blind?
[verse 2]
Not like other girls, you didn't care for Taylor Swift.
Your idol was Janis Joplin, an icon from years gone by.
You wore ripped jeans from your early teens,
tough outside, but little things made you cry.
[chorus]
Well, you're out there, for all to see
Causin' chaos, from Alaska to Nebraska
Slippin' and Slidin', weavin' 'n windin',
Makin' it, back home to me.
[verse 3]
Boys were scared of you, I thought you were great,
A sugar rush on salad days, I wanted to be like you.
You formed a band, and took it on the road,
Leavin' a path of chaos, wherever you passed through
[chorus]
Well, you're out there, for all to see,
Causin' chaos, from Alaska to Nebraska.
Slippin' and Slidin', weavin' 'n windin',
Makin' it, back home to me.
[verse 4]
You toured the Northern States,
through snow and hail and gales.
The bus you used had seen better days,
bush-fixed things when they failed.
[chorus]
Well, you're out there, for all to see
Causin' chaos, from Alaska to Nebraska
Slippin' and Slidin', weavin' 'n windin',
Makin' it, back home to me.
[bridge]
One bad night up in Oregon, ice was on the road,
Your bus lost control and fell into the river.
The water was too cold, for anyone to survive,
your poster on my wall, my way to keep you alive.
[chorus]
Well, you're out there, for all to see
Causin' chaos, from Alaska to Nebraska
Slippin' and Slidin', weavin' 'n windin',
Makin' it, back home to me.
[outro]
Slippin' and Slidin', weavin' 'n windin',
Makin' it, back home to me.
Slippin' and Slidin', weavin' 'n windin',
Makin' it, back home to me.
Comments
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Hey Sid,
I like this one, specially the chorus. It gives a real country feeling. The bridge was very surprising at first but I think a „lil drama“ like this makes a good country song. 😅
There is only a little thing and that’s that some lines in your verses seem to long. I think there is no problem with shortening these parts. In this kinda song a „wanna“ and no „i wanted to“ gives a more familiar feeling. Like the rulebook says: short and direct, your recipients will get it. 👍
Hope I could have been helpful!
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You're absolutely right RK, I'm afraid the storyteller in me tends to elaboration sometimes.
Thanks for the constructive feedback, always appreciated
Sid
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Ahh ol' Sid goan country, I love love love it.
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You may laugh, but it's true! I have absolutely no interest in CW at all, I don't play it, listen to it, or claim to even understand it, and yet I've written dozens of songs in the genre. Go figure, cos I can't.
Just for another laugh, I'll post some next week so you belt buckling , line dancers can have a good holler!
Appreciate the comments, Y'all
Sid
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I like the song. Not 100% sure about the bridge. I feel like the song would work just as well without.
I think "Makin' it, back home to me." makes the song work. It's not an inspiration line, but somehow it ties things together.
Good stuff.
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