Weepin‘
Ola,
I also found this little piece and brushed it up a little. It’s from •06 and I changed a little bit in A+ but that’s about it.
I remember I wrote it when a friendship came to an end. We were very close and so I let my thoughts fly and this here came together.
Feedback and comments are welcome.
RK
Weepin‘
No more tears? No reason to cry? A‘
Is this our way to say goodbye?
I look into your empty eyes
And then I start to realize
A labyrinth of hopeless calls
Emotions just like waterfalls
Where does it start? Where will it end?
Without a word? Without a friend?
What went wrong? What have we done? A+
Because our paradise is gone
Maybe our table turned around
And our voices lost it’s sound
I’m standing in a vacant hall
Just empty paintings on the wall
We’ve walked together hand in hand
Our solid ground has turned to sand
Weepin‘ at night. B
We’re running alone
Into the unknown
And are weepin‘ at night
Weepin‘ at night
We’re running alone
Into the unknown
And are weepin‘ at night
C [solo]. C
No more tears? No reason to cry? A*
Is this our way to say goodbye?
Empty eyes
I realize
A labyrinth of hopeless calls
Emotions just like waterfalls
Mhhmmh…
©️by Ian P./ •06-reworked 15.10.24/for: VALENTINE+B and fpeee…
I also found this little piece and brushed it up a little. It’s from •06 and I changed a little bit in A+ but that’s about it.
I remember I wrote it when a friendship came to an end. We were very close and so I let my thoughts fly and this here came together.
Feedback and comments are welcome.
RK
Weepin‘
No more tears? No reason to cry? A‘
Is this our way to say goodbye?
I look into your empty eyes
And then I start to realize
A labyrinth of hopeless calls
Emotions just like waterfalls
Where does it start? Where will it end?
Without a word? Without a friend?
What went wrong? What have we done? A+
Because our paradise is gone
Maybe our table turned around
And our voices lost it’s sound
I’m standing in a vacant hall
Just empty paintings on the wall
We’ve walked together hand in hand
Our solid ground has turned to sand
Weepin‘ at night. B
We’re running alone
Into the unknown
And are weepin‘ at night
Weepin‘ at night
We’re running alone
Into the unknown
And are weepin‘ at night
C [solo]. C
No more tears? No reason to cry? A*
Is this our way to say goodbye?
Empty eyes
I realize
A labyrinth of hopeless calls
Emotions just like waterfalls
Mhhmmh…
©️by Ian P./ •06-reworked 15.10.24/for: VALENTINE+B and fpeee…
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Comments
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Unusual structure to the song which I like, ditto the rhyming scheme, also like.
The emotions do come out of the words, you can sense the loss.
very good.
Sid
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Tyvm sid0
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I like this one. I think that opening verse is really good. Emotional, raw, honest.
And I love: "A labyrinth of hopeless calls"
As a minor suggestion ' voices lost it’s sound" } " voices lost their sound"
In the chorus it might be stronger to end on a shortened version: "and weepin'" rather than the straight repetition. it would also mirror your title then.
But overall it's a good one.
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