Whispers Shouts

I have decided not to post ai generated music on here as so many either don't care for it or wont even open the post because of it. Instead I will make the ai music for my personal experience and learning to use audactiy.

This piece as it is, is too metaphor heavy and is in its rough draft stage but I like where this is leading. I see this going along with The Bard and another I have called Virtue & Vice where the bard tells how he creates and what he experiences to create, V&V is more about life's choices presented to the bard and Whispers Shouts is well, his inner voice of the bard. It also is too long still. Yeah I already took out three verses.

As for its genre, I initially made a hardcore deep mississippi/chicago blues generation but found it to be a little soft toned for the song vocally. I then kept diving deeper into the heavier rock stuff and found a grimy grunge sound that worked. It is still blues heavy but with rough sounding guitar with a driving rhythm.

[Verse]

I'm always there when you close your eyes

to show you what's at stake

I bring the shackles to your mind

I'll push till you break!


[Chorus]

Heed my call, your chapter's yet unscripted 

Choose wisdom for your path Or watch your life get GRIFTED!


[Verse 2]

I'm the first tick in your tock

The hour hand you lost

I'm subtle and sublime

In the methods I abuse

Shifting your perceptions

RESISTANCE IS NO USE!


[Chorus]

Heed my call, your chapter's yet unscripted 

Choose wisdom for your path Or watch your life get grifted!


[Verse 3]

I'm the current in your ocean

the flatness of your pond

Your spark of inspiration and

the shoulder you lean upon

I invigorate and fuel the wild

deep within your seed

I'm the desperation planted in your

SELFISH PLOT OF GREED!


[Chorus]

Heed my call, your chapter yet unscripted 

Choose wisdom for your path Or watch your life get grifted!


[Verse 4]

I have shouted from my whispers

tipping the scales my way

My voice makes your madness cry

Run faster to the fray!


[Verse 5]

I'm the coin laid in the pipers boney hand

For hearing his ghostly song

I'm the notes that float away from you

In the raging of your storm

I lurk around your every turn in all the corners of your dark

I'm the loose and grinding gear In the tool that always sparks!


[Chorus]

Heed my call, your chapter's yet unscripted 

Choose wisdom for your path Or watch your life get grifted!


[Verse 6]

I'm always watching over you

In all your biased claims

Helping you decide the choice

or help to make you go insane

Though I raise concern in you

For fueling your fire

Without me life's a bore and

You'd be much less than satisfied!


[Outro]

So thank me for my input and the persuasion I impart

Without my constant tugs

At the taut strings of your pale heart

Your fire would be quenched

No choice of yours concluded

I'm your friend who shouts in whispers

My voice won't be eluded

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Comments

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside

    Prysmatyk,

    I am sorry you have made the decision to no longer share a link to the Ai component of your songs.

    Being new to the forum, you work hard to improve your songwriting and with the help of decent members you did well.

    On behalf of those same decent members I must apologize for the small contingent of bigots who have ostracized

    your work, and others, for using Ai as a simple tool to improve your work.

    This is the first sentence preceding advice on Ai generated songs

    The Songwriters Forum (TSF) was created as a place for songwriters to help other songwriters. The intention here was clearly about people helping other people, and this is the principle for what follows.

    To those who support this discrimination, Shame on you!

    Sid

  • prysmatyk
    prysmatyk Usa
    edited October 2024

    Really Sid?

    @RainyDayMan Please lock and close this thread.

    I'd rather have the post die than have an emotionally charged convo here.

    Thanks!

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside

    As you wish, we're done!

  • MoraAmaroLaLoba
    MoraAmaroLaLoba Madrid (Spain)

    It has a wonderful cadence, this, among others, is a wonderful part

    "I'm the first tick in your tock

    The hour hand you lost

    I'm subtle and sublime

    In the methods I abuse

    Shifting your perceptions"

  • 'I'm the first tick in your tock'..I love that line and the whole of that 2nd verse.

    I can imagine this a quite a blues rocker, but it would need the right voice.

    Good stuff.😀

  • Thanks for the compliments.
    @MoraAmaroLaLoba @ChrisPrice That second line of the tick verse I am not satisfied with. Go figure.

    Thanks again for the comments
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