Whenever Our Hearts Beat The Same
Whenever Our Hearts Beat The Same
I have already received some good constructive feedback and am working on making some changes but wanted to put the original out hear to get some second thoughts before I change too much...
https://soundcloud.com/user-655800373/whenever-our-hearts-beat-the-same
You’ve seen the worst of me it’s true
An understand that I won’t change
No one knows you like I do
You’re unpredictable and strange
You don’t my friends or where we go
Or care too much for clothes I wear
Can’t stand to watch those daytime shows
You make me watch and you don’t care
Chorus:
So what is the attraction?
Can someone please explain?
This undeniable reaction
Whenever our hearts beat the same
Tell me why do our hearts beat the same
You like sports, that would be great
If I were born my fathers son
I seldom do appreciate
The kind of things you think are fun
You like walking on the sand
Soft candle lights… a perfect day
I like listening to the band
Playing loud and staying late
Chorus:
So what is the attraction?
Can someone please explain?
This undeniable reaction
Whenever our hearts beat the same
Tell me why do our hearts beat the same
Repeat Chorus
Comments
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Firstly, I really like this song. I like the vocals and the way the song shifts. I think the bass could come forward a bit and I can imagine more instrumentation over the verses. Maybe a Hammond sound or similar - just in the background. So said, the song develops really well as it goes along. As it stands, the end is a bit abrupt for me. But these are very minor crits. I wouldn't change too much at all. I really enjoyed this😀
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Chris, pretty spot on with other comments I've been getting regarding upping the bass and filling out the verses a bit more. I am currently working piano into the verses and am probably going to add the strings to the first chorus as well. I'm sure I can also address the ending too. Thank you for sharing your thoughts Chris!
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It's a good song, and I think the chorus is particularly strong. I also really enjoyed the change up at the instrumental.
The mood feels contemplative, which fits the questioning nature of the song.
In terms of finessing, yes the bass could come up a bit and maybe needs some compression or something to add a little punch?
The overall mix is a little treble heavy, but if you're already adding piano that may do the trick
Good stuff 😀
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That's a nice song. I can't fault the composition. The bass definitely needs to come up in volume maybe a few dbs and may be cut a little top end off the guitars?
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I like the sound of the music and vocals. It has a nice feel that matches the vibe of the lyrics.
I do find some of the language a bit sexist.
Overall, I enjoyed the listen.
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Billy,
Thanks for listening and commenting! I bumped the base up a bit and added a little piano to the mix on the verses. Hopefully this helps balance it out a bit.
Revised version below...
https://soundcloud.com/user-655800373/whenever-our-hearts-beat-the-same-revised
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I've had another listen, well quite a few actually. I think with the addition of the piano it feels as thought bass is a similar volume as before. I'm not sure but maybe it needs a bit of volume automation to differentiate between the verses and chorus. It's still a good either way!
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Yeah Billy, the crazy thing is, when I was listening on my home system the base and the piano seemed to come through a lot louder. To the point where after bringing them both up I backed them off a bit. However, listening on soundcloud it does not sound that much different. I'll try bumping the base back up. Logic also has some half way decent mastering tools I have not applied yet. Maybe I can bring that high end down a bit as well. Thanks again for your input!
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Hi Tom,
Very hip, and truly relatable song.
Your vocals is so warm, and very nice on the ear!!!
Instruments are well played and well mixed.
Simply lovely.
Rene
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Tom.
It is a good mix already, it probably doesn't need anymore bass. Besides I'm led to believe soundcloud do some sort of levelling, dare I say "mastering" as you upload your audio file.
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Yes sometimes that's a problem. It sounds as expected until you load it up, then you find they've automatically applied whatever process they use - eq'ing I suppose. I've occasionally had to adjust a file before loading it to Soundcloud.
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I think the second version is much better. The bass isn't much louder but I'm not sure that it matters now as the arrangement sounds fuller. I agree with RDM's comments about Soundcloud. I had a similar experience with Bandcamp some time back. I digress, hearing this a second time, I think this is a great song and it's really well arranged and performed.😀
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Andrea, First of all, thank you for taking time to listen and comment. Regarding the sexist comment, I would certainly appreciate clarification on what specific lines you found sexist. Believe me when I say this, I have the utmost respect for everyone's critique or opinions. I would simply like to understand what part you were offended by.
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Owen and Billy, Thanks for chiming in about Soundcloud. I thought I was just loosing my mind a little. Although that is quite possible too!
Rene, Thanks for the kind words!
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Hola @Tom W
It's a so catchy song!!! Really well produced and sang!!! Very enjoyable
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I didn't say I was offended. I said some of the language is sexist. For instance, it is implied that women, and not men, enjoy soap operas, or tabloid talk shows, (I don't watch daytime TV, so I could be completely off here) and care more about clothes they wear. It is also implied that men like sports, but women do not. Since the singer is male, I am drawing these conclusions. It is possible that the man's partner is not a female, but I expect most people would assume so.
Maybe I am reading this wrong:
"You like sports, that would be great
If I were born my fathers son" - this line suggests the singer is a woman
BTW, you have a typo in this line:
"You don’t my friends or where we go" - I believe the "like' is missing.
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Andrea,
Just a point of clarification, the singer was a males voice and perspective the entire time. The expression not born his fathers son simply implied he did not have the same interests as his father. In the song, it is actually the woman who likes sports, not the man. Growing up, my father had a passion for hunting and fishing. I however did not. People in my family often said I was not born my fathers son in that regard. I was more into music and art. So, I am definitely not prone to male or female stereotypes. Maybe it was poor wording on my part that made you feel otherwise. It is not a common phrase for sure. I truly appreciate your time and your candor.
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I just re read your post and realized you made an assumption that a man who doesn't like sports he is gay? Seriously? LOL!
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I don't know why you are saying this. I am not assuming that at all. I am reading your lyrics and it seems to suggest that women don't like sports. But I am confused because the singer is a man, and this line suggests the singer is a woman: "If I were born my fathers son".
According to the lyrics alone, I feel they imply women don't like sports.
You said this to my comment:
"Regarding the sexist comment, I would certainly appreciate clarification on what specific lines you found sexist. Believe me when I say this, I have the utmost respect for everyone's critique or opinions. I would simply like to understand what part you were offended by."
I don't feel that you are reacting with respect. They are your lyrics, and you can do as you please. I find some of the language sexist, but I am just one person. You can ignore my comments or take my comments into consideration. Please do not turn my comments into something more than they are. If I misunderstood something, feel free to enlighten me, but please don't make accusations about me.
I am not looking for a fight, I was just trying to give sincere feedback. Thanks
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Tom,
Great song writing. This has it all. Nice work. Great playing.
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