🅰️embers of your flame
https://audius.co/sidshovel/embers-of-your-flame (right click then open link in new tab,) to open song. lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
One of the first songs I wrote back in February
[intro]
[verse 1]
Did you ever, really want me.
Was there a reason, you couldn't look me in the eye.
day by day, the distance grew between us.
Was everything you said just a lie, just a lie.
[Verse 2]
There's a coldness, in your touch
Your thoughts, are a million miles away
You left his Facebook page, open on your phone
He changed his status, that very same day
[Chorus]
There's a candle still burning in your heart
Your memories are tearing us apart
In your dreams, you whisper his name
Sighs fan the embers of your flame
[verse 3]
They're comin' back, those thoughts of him.
To the surface, though they weren't deep.
The locket, you thought, you hid well.
His name, you murmur, in your sleep.
[Chorus]
There's a candle still burning in your heart
Your memories are tearing us apart
In your dreams, you whisper his name
Sighs fan the embers of your flame
[bridge]
The goodbye note was short and sour
No words of regret just an emoji frown
An empty glass of whiskey and my car keys
A forwarding address in her hometown
[Chorus]
There's a candle still burning in your heart
Your memories are tearing us apart
In your dreams, you whisper his name
Sighs fan the embers of your flame
[Outro]
the embers of your flame
the embers of your flame
[Fade to End]
Comments
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I just read this one and it’s very good! I especially like those parts inbetween:
There's a coldness, in your touch
Your thoughts, are a million miles away…
Gives a very harsh feeling.
The other line I do love is:
Sighs fan the embers of your flame
That’s a damn genius one!
Very WELL done!
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One of those songs where you can really feel the agony of each word in the lyrics. The bridge is the real kicker when we find out that while the narrator made this very heartfelt song for her, she literally just left him a short note with a frown emoji. And ain’t that just how it goes sometimes? :p.
Similar to @RainbowKeeper, “sighs fan the embers of your flame” is my favorite line here. It’s lovely imagery. For an early one, it looked like you already had your technique down. Really enjoyed it Sid 🙂0 -
Pretty good for one of your first efforts!
You might consider putting the Bridge into 2nd person to be consistent, unless you specifically want a change in POV there.
Could make a good country song too.
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Nick,
It's only fair to point out that whilst the lyrics are mine, the music and vocals are generated by Ai over which I have very limited control. But nevertheless, I do thank you for taking the trouble to listen.
Sid
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Not to worry Nick, there some really good musicians on this forum that get stumped too. Most members that use Ai as part of their submission will indicate such at the top of their lyric page. I make it a bit easier by banging a big A next to the title. Either way, I'm glad you liked it. I hope you post something soon and welcome to the forum.
Sid
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