Do I really…
After writing this in 2007, being in a damn love triangle, I was sure about the Fakt, that writing is more than a hobby for me. It was the first „big“ piece!
Let me know what you think.
I did a very quick rework today.
Thanks
RK
DO I REALLY...?
How can it be that I am speachless? A‘
And why am I out of control?
Some days ago I have been aimless
But now I know that love's the goal
A whispering voice through the dark night
A fire placed on cold blue ice
Like a bright gleaming guidin' light
More than a wish, more than a vice
What's at the end of the rainbow? A+
Rainbow's colours inside my eyes
That's everything I want to know
I hope I can find more than lies
Childish fears and hidden starlights
Or a clear and straight decision?
Full of sorrows and inner fights
Does it stay only a vision?
Do I really waste my time? B
I'm searching, I'm looking for the clue
Do I really waste my time?
But I know I wouldn't waste my time
If I waste my time with you
Show me paintings that haven't been painted
Tell me stories with words I haven't heared before
Show me paintings that haven't been painted. C
Show me everything...
And a little bit more.
How can it be that I am speachless? A*
And why am I out of control?
Some days ago I have been aimless
But now I know that love's the goal
Childish fears and hidden starlights
Or a clear and straight decision?
Full of sorrows and inner fights
It can't only be a vision
©️by Ian P./ 2007 reworked 2.10.2024/for: VALENTINE+B and F.Peee…
Let me know what you think.
I did a very quick rework today.
Thanks
RK
DO I REALLY...?
How can it be that I am speachless? A‘
And why am I out of control?
Some days ago I have been aimless
But now I know that love's the goal
A whispering voice through the dark night
A fire placed on cold blue ice
Like a bright gleaming guidin' light
More than a wish, more than a vice
What's at the end of the rainbow? A+
Rainbow's colours inside my eyes
That's everything I want to know
I hope I can find more than lies
Childish fears and hidden starlights
Or a clear and straight decision?
Full of sorrows and inner fights
Does it stay only a vision?
Do I really waste my time? B
I'm searching, I'm looking for the clue
Do I really waste my time?
But I know I wouldn't waste my time
If I waste my time with you
Show me paintings that haven't been painted
Tell me stories with words I haven't heared before
Show me paintings that haven't been painted. C
Show me everything...
And a little bit more.
How can it be that I am speachless? A*
And why am I out of control?
Some days ago I have been aimless
But now I know that love's the goal
Childish fears and hidden starlights
Or a clear and straight decision?
Full of sorrows and inner fights
It can't only be a vision
©️by Ian P./ 2007 reworked 2.10.2024/for: VALENTINE+B and F.Peee…
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Comments
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Well constructed and clearly conveys it's meaning.
I like it and enjoyed the shared experience emotionally.
Real powerful first verse almost pressing the songs meaning upon me.
The following verses enforced the theme and built upon the emotions while letting us decide things.
The method of posing questions for you and everyone to answer brings the piece further into our world.
Your expression showed me much but also raised many q? Lol1 -
This is deep and personal and written that way.
I confess to having to read it 4-5 times to fully grasp everything, but that's a reflection of my own limitations rather than the lyrics.
It's heart-wrenching as you would expect and you communicate that effectively, painting a painful picture of hurt and indecision.
I enjoyed the piece but felt for you in the words.
Experiences that writ the tapestry of life.
Sid
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Thanks pry and Sid! This one really means a lot to me. You know when you have written many pieces but only a few are always with you? This is one of those pieces!
Once again thank you!0 -
It showed through the well constructed emotional conveyance. I am glad to have read it and felt its depth.
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