Sweet Little Sin
Here’s a collaboration from lyrics provided by Prysmatyk. He also supplied an AI generated musical outline from which I took the chords and style and programmed into BIAB. Of course, it’s me singing 😊
There are things I would have liked to include in the production but I’m still so new at it, I couldn’t figure it out quite yet….still in the process of learning so much in all areas of writing, recording, producing!
Sweet Little Sin
[Verse 1]
Sweet little sin,
petite and thin,
luring him close
with every whim.
Entering her chamber,
leading to danger,
after her touch,
he's no longer a stranger.
[Verse 2]
Her compromise,
a delightful surprise,
hypnotic allure,
in her gaze, he sighs.
collections cascade,
thoughts softly parade,
binding his affections,
endlessly, he stayed.
[Soulful Saxophone-Solo]
Her compromise,
a delightful surprise,
hypnotic allure,
in her gaze, he sighs.
collections cascade,
thoughts softly parade,
binding his affections,
endlessly, he stayed.
[Soulful Saxophone-Solo]
[Chorus]
Hearts entwined,
time stands still,
yours and mine.
we feel the thrill.
[Verse 3]
He's captive and caged,
completely engaged,
writing words on the page.
[Verse 4]
Memories meld,
worlds where lover’s dwell,
held forever,
the story to tell.
[Chorus]
Hearts entwined,
time stands still,
yours and mine.
we feel the thrill.
Comments
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Hey there! While reading I was a bit unsure about two sax soli. After listening I think it’s fine if you call it bridges or connectors, a solo means more to me than it is in the song.
One small thing I would change:
after her touch,-> after they touch
Makes more sense.
You have good voice material, you can sound very smooth and clear. My advice would be: learn to do more technical stuff with your voice, so that you can use your instrument more precisely on the parts of the song.
Hope I could have been helpful!
RK0 -
This is amazing thanks to you're voice. So nicely done. Thank you for making my words come to life.0
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@RainbowKeeper Thanks for your input! I am interested in improving my vocal chops. I'm rusty - it's been years since I've sung but I do wish to get them back up to snuff along with learning some vocal techniques as I never had an voice lessons. I learned from listening to other singers.
@prysmatyk You're welcome! Glad you're happy with the rendition!
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This came out really well. They're lovely lyrics, and this is a fine rendition.
Very cool jazzy vibe! Lovely to see another collab.
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@Plain_Jane Happy is an understatement, it's awesome! You can sing along with angels and match their heavenly sounds. Not much plain about it.
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Awesome! An excellent collaboration! The lyrics are very good, and the vocals are great as always! Nice work! I enjoyed listening! 😀
Cheers,
Joseph
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It transports you to some smokey joint in Casablanca and captures the mood perfectly.
Reading the lyrics, I thought challenging, but you made it sound so simple.
Well done to you both, enjoyed it very much.
Sid
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Ah that voice can make any song pull my heart strings
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@RainyDayMan @prysmatyk @icystorm @sidshovel @StoneFlowers
Thank you for all the lovely compliments!
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Wow, what a sultry little tune, total Casablanca vibes, like Sid said. I can absolutely picture this in a black and white film in a jazz club scene. The combination of the lyrics from @prysmatyk and your own vocals really make the magic happen. Great job you two!
Tommy1 -
@BeatlesFan64 Thank you!
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@BeatlesFan64 It was in her delivery Tommy, words are flat without the vocal acuity to breath life into em.
Again, thank you so much for performing this @Plain_Jane
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