🅰️behind those tiny eyes (lies my whole world)

https://audius.co/sidshovel/behind-those-tiny-eyes (right click then open link in new tab,) to open song. lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
[intro]
[verse 1]
I've been chased by the police, handcuffed to a table,
given a ticket for parking, in a spot for the disabled.
In the language of social services, I'm a lost cause,
being seen with me, isn't gonna open any doors.
[verse 2]
Lived my life on the run, not a care, just havin' fun.
Loved 'em, left 'em, gave my bed to no one.
Too drunk to take much notice, foolin' all around,
two lines on a stick, my world came crashin' down.
[chorus]
Behind those tiny eyes, lies my whole world,
a blank canvas, like snow in the morning.
Her life's in my hands, the first to trust me,
for both of us, a new world's dawning
[verse 3]
The one sure thing, I want my child to be,
all the things I never was, not to be like me.
Not to want to run away, leave it all behind,
Love, care and warmth, things I didn't find.
[chorus]
Behind those tiny eyes, lies my whole world,
a blank canvas, like snow in the morning.
Her life's in my hands, the first to trust me,
for both of us, a new world's dawning
[bridge]
All her fingers wrap around my thumb.
already she's scared to let me go.
Waitin' for the day, she calls me Mum,
share my dreams that faded long ago.
[chorus]
Behind those tiny eyes, lies my whole world,
a blank canvas, like snow in the morning.
Her life's in my hands, the first to trust me,
for both of us, a new world's dawning
[outro]
Behind those tiny eyes, lay my whole world,
a world completely turned by one little girl.
Comments
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@sidshovel . . . some well written lyrics, really enjoyed the story unfold.
"a blank canvas, like snow in the morning." now that's a brilliant line in your chorus !
It's a real life story that many will relate to . . . a new life born changes someone's life. I'm thinking a fuller, thicker mix in the second half of this song, build the drums etc. . . could really help it emotionally deliver to a higher level, just like the lyrics do . . . not sure the AI would accommodate, or if you could add that idea into it ? . . . nevertheless, I did enjoy the song very much !
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Thanks so much for the constructive feedback. Your right re the fuller mix, recently I read about Power Mapping songs, I had a go with the lyrics but for the life of me I couldn't get the Ai to cooperate. Until a couple of days ago, I stumbled onto someones suggestion to use [DROP] for bridge and [Final Chorus] these power up and down respectively. So I'm experimenting with those in more recent songs.
Sid
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An awfully pretty song. So again, you wrote the lyrics and plugged them into an AI app? And then directed the app apply a certain genre to the song? Is that correct?
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More or less, the level of control is minimal and the output to a large degree is random. I always set a fixed time and number of credits and take the best that falls within that. I usually ask people not to comment on the Ai components because of the poor control and quality output.
Sid
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The lyrics are awesome and fit together like a plug and socket. Smoothly vocalized by AI and the track fit the lyrics well.
I liked v2 the best but you deserved that ticket. Lol
Good song and good solid lyrics!0 -
If it gives you some enjoyment, then that's enough for me.
Thanks for your comments
Sid
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That's a heck of a story!
My favorite line: "for both of us, a new world's dawning"
Nicely done Sid!
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Feel like I'm walking on eggshells here Sid, but I'm going to review this whether you like it or not!
This is a tremendous lyric. At the beginning I thought rock song, until I read further. It's actually very tender and moving. The last line brought a tear. Fabulous.
The AI (yes, I checked that out too!) I like the instrumental arrangement. The vocal's good - the right voice for sure. Just a bit too loud for me. Maybe one or two phrasing issues, but that may just be me.
Well done.😀
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Beautiful song! Great lyric and I like the choice of music style you chose. When I first read the first few verses, I thought it was going to be more of a hard rock tune but the style you picked fits it so well!
I really enjoyed this! Great job! 😃
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Thank you Jane, I tried to get the music to reflect the lifestyles before and after the epiphany.
Appreciate your comments Chris, no worries, truth has no fear where it treads.
By the way, what are phrasings?
Sid
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Phrasing issues? Perhaps the wrong way to describe it. I mean where the AI vocal maybe sounds a bit un-natural.. Maybe sings a particular phrase in a way that we wouldn't. Don't read too much into it though..it could just be me. As I said, I really like this one.😀
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Chris, in my opinion, your not reading enough into it, 50% sounds unnatural to me!
Sid
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The internal banter over an AI generated voice being natural... Hahaha
As was told to me by a wise and profilic master we all know here, AI vocals are what sounds the most AI!
Still think the song is great and lyrics are, well, explicative great!0 -
😂 95% of what I do sounds unnatural to me!!
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Tell me Mr Price, when did you first experience these unnatural urges, please lie down here and tell me all about it!
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