Solitary Throne - Blues
I took to making another song in Suno to share my lyrics audibly. It's not as bluesy as I envision it should be but at least the vocals are prominently heard. In my head I hear this raspy baritone slightly off key or strained voice wailing as he seduces the notes from his guitar. A smoky room filled with the scents of alcohol and tobacco hanging in the air, murmuring crowds speaking in hushed tones in the background and the raw emotions of the era. A shanty of sorts where people just did there thing.
Well enough of my imagination, lets give you my new creation. (ai's creation using my lyrics to be accurate)
Solitary Throne
[Verse 1]
She’s gone forever, no turning back this time,
Drew the line, now she’s living in my mind.
Pretend I'm happy, lost in life alone,
Skeptical of love, on my solitary throne.
[Chorus]
Echoes of her memory, with every step I take,
Tears keep falling down, it’s hard not to hesitate.
My fragile heart now torn, her memory still held dear.
Now fallin' in love again is what I fear.
[Verse 2]
She used to sleep so softly on a pillow made of silk,
Hair untamed and free, complexion white as milk.
Longing for her laughter, craving for her smile,
But she’s gone forever, can't go on another mile.
[Chorus]
Echoes of her memory, with every step I take,
Tears keep falling down, it’s hard not to hesitate.
My fragile heart now torn, her memory still held dear.
Now fallin' in love again is what I fear.
[Bridge]
In the shadows of the night, I'm cryin' out her name,
All the love we had, gone and I'm the one to blame.
Still, I hope she finds what she’s searches for,
But deep inside I know, my heart's a broken door.
[Chorus]
Echoes of her memory, with every step I take,
Tears keep falling down, it’s hard not to hesitate.
My fragile heart now torn, her memory still held dear
Now fallin' in love again is what I fear.
[Outro]
She’s gone forever, but her spirit lingers on,
In the depths of my heart, her memory’s never gone.
Comments
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Well done, very good song, excellent bluesy number, can see you are enjoying your newfound freedom of expression.
Some advice going forward,
currently, as in this song, your still using your poetry rhyme structure on all sections.
try to vary the sections using different rhyme structures
e.g. verse AABB (the one your using now)
chorus ABAB
bridge ABBA
This creates a bit of variation throughout the song to combat monotony and maintain interest.
Try it on your next song and compare it with this to see the effect.
Well done, keep them coming, maybe you're the next Jimmy Webb, (Google him).
Sid
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Jimmy Webb huh, to me that's laughable but at least I now know who write MacArthur Park. lol
I'm glad to get a positive reply on the lyrics and I do get the rhyme scheme switching. It is just how this particular set of words evolved for me as I sought to tell the story. I'll switch it up for my next song as many of my poems are if differing schemes of rhymes.
Thanks for the compliment and direction.
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That's a nice line: Echoes of her memory, with every step I take,
There's plenty of blues in it, but maybe you wanted a more melancholy sound, this is fairly upbeat.
Good stuff.
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Yes, more melancholic sound was what I tried for. Suno does not do what it is told to do. YET! If it is possible to be done, I will find a method.
Thanks again for the compliment and comment.0 -
Try this prompt,
male vocals, sad melancholic, low-fidelity chill, ambient, slow post-minimalism, synth
Sid
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Sid, you have become our in-house AI guru! Thanks for sharing your knowledge!
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Still tying to figure this out...so you put your lyrics into the app and it came up with the song..that great guitar...that heavy soulful voice?? Is that correct??
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@StoneFlowers pretty much. There's more to it but not too much more as it will generate something from bare lyrics and the descriptors sid put above.
That's how I made The Deal. This song I tried to do different prompts to get a deeper blues sound but it went away from what I entered.
It's a hit of miss for me ATM and a lot of other people from what I've read.
Truly I am torn between using it and not using it. I do feel as if it is a disservice to musicians but also that it allows me to hear how I feel the thing should roughly sound.0 -
prysmatyk are you paying a subscription fee?
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Truly I am torn between using it and not using it. I do feel as if it is a disservice to musicians but also that it allows me to hear how I feel the thing should roughly sound.
That's exactly how I felt from the first moment I started using Ai, I had and displayed a great deal of empathy towards the musicians and their fears. Sadly, after a recent thread which opened my eyes to some true feelings some musicians have towards Ai users on this site, I no longer feel that way.
I intend to continue using Ai in whatever way I choose that helps me and be less inclined to worry about anyone else or apologize for it!
Sid
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RDM,
Helping others is why I chose this site over others.
I have received a great deal of help on my ongoing journey to be a decent songwriter.
It's an honour to give something back, it is also the reason I fight as hard as I do to ensure this site does nor become like the others.
Sid
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@StoneFlowers no, I'm a poet so that should tell you something. Lol
@sidshovel it is not a good feeling as I do like what the AI has generated but it lacks creation. All I do is create the lyrics and set the AI parameters. The AI does it's thing. That, to me and others isn't really making music; it is pulling together data from the mass it has accumulated.
Still I admit openly that what it creates from my lyrics pleases me because I finally can hear it. I've spoken it aloud and it sounds like someone speaking but sung even by AI allows it to mesh inside my mind.
Maybe tmi for everyone but at least now my position couldn't be more clear.
In closing I would always be honored to share my words with any musician or try to write for them.0 -
I like this version but I have to admit I would really want to hear the more melancholy version you envisioned. I just watched Eight Men Out (which is set in the late 1910s) the other day, and was thinking while listening to this that if it was given a slower arrangement with more room to breathe, it would fit right in on that soundtrack. Even now, I can hear the potential for that roaring 20s / Great Depression era smoky blues club vibe.1
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A lot of people commenting here, of course, it is a sooo good song! Level on voice? I think it's ok, just what this style needed. Fantastic work, rally @prysmatyk
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Well, err, I have absolutely no problem reviewing track this because I think it's great. And, no I don't mind that it's AI !! The lyrics are excellent and the AI does some nice tricks here which I'd really enjoy hearing played by a live band.
😀
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Wow, thank you all for the great comments on my lyrics. I hope to be able to contribute many more. The ai did a decent enough job but it really deserves to be performed by someone to come to life.
@BeatlesFan64 that's the era I shot for.
@MoraAmaroLaLoba I don't know of a way to adjust the voice volume in suno or post.
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