You Could Be A Serial Killer

OnlyGavin · January 2023

A new song I'm working on. All comments and suggestions appreciated as always.

https://soundcloud.com/themysteriousbeings/you-could-be-a-serial-killer/s-YV5hwas8khu

YOU COULD BE A SERIAL KILLER

You could be a serial killer and I'd love the cute way

You held the knife

When you drive at eighty-five, I don't know how we'll survive

But to go with you I'll risk my life

I'm so in love with you

Can't get enough of everything that you do

You think you're a superstar

Well, baby, maybe you are

When I see you come in the room

I know my heart should run for cover

Something in the way you assume we'll resume

What we started and you'll be my lover

No point in fighting it,

I know that you're right 'n'

It’s happening again

Maybe I need rehab to cure me of thinking it would be fab

To be your man

Something in my psyche that makes me say, "I likey"

Instead of getting out while I can

I guess that's just my way

Can't help believing every word that you say

I know I should run a mile

But then you flash that smile

When I see you come in the room

I know my heart should run for cover

Something in the way you assume we'll resume

What we started and you'll be my lover

No point in fighting it,

I know that you're right 'n'

It’s happening again

[Instrumental break]

No use wishing, I could break free.

My condition has no remedy.

Gave up the fight so long ago,

But I guess you already know

When I see you come in the room

I know my heart should run for cover

Something in the way you assume we'll resume

What we started and you'll be my lover

No point in fighting it,

I know that you're right 'n'

It’s happening again

Copyright Gavin Sinclair 2023

ReneAsologuitar · January 2023

I love the idea of this song lyrics.

Very catchy words, and the melody is cute.

That is a huge knife, but the knife disappears with her beautiful face.

Thanks for this lovely song!!!

Rene

RainyDayMan · January 2023

I feel like the music is a bit laid back for the lyric. You could try a more up-tempo, darker and higher energy version.

I like the lyric, especially the opening line. You could even bend the whole song more in that direction - but maybe that's a different song!

It's clever and amusing.

icystorm · January 2023

Good song, with a catchy, upbeat melody. Nice work, Gavin! The sax during the middle break and outro was a nice addition. I enjoyed listening. 😀

OnlyGavin · January 2023

Thanks Rene, Owen and icystorm.

Owen, I get what you are saying about the music and lyric. I think it maybe applies mostly to the first line which suggests the song is going to be edgier than it is.

ChrisPrice · January 2023

The sax intro drew me in right away. I think this is a terrific song. It's hard to offer crits because this is great. Maybe it could do with a change of mood somewhere in the middle to give it a bit more variety. So said, I really like this as it is. Great lyrics btw. 😀