The darker side of me
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The darker side of me
[Verse]
The doubts I have about myself
Are chains I strain to break.
I’m caught up in a tug of war.
Don’t know which side to take.
[Chorus]
I’ve built walls without windows
For fear the world would see.
Don’t want the sun to shine in on
The darker side of me.
There’s a tiger on the prowl.
Where danger lies unseen.
In the shadows of the night.
The darker side of me.
[Verse]
These eyes are blind my tongue is tied
Can’t see or speak the truth.
The weeds they overgrow my mind
Where logic can’t take root.
[Chorus]
I’ve built walls without windows
For fear the world would see.
Don’t want the sun to shine in on
The darker side of me.
There’s a tiger on the prowl.
Where danger lies unseen.
In the shadows of the night.
The darker side of me.
[Verse]
My ears are deaf to what you say.
Hope has no home in here.
My fears they overwhelm my faith.
These eyes they shed no tears.
[Chorus]
I’ve built walls without windows
For fear the world would see.
Don’t want the sun to shine in on
The darker side of me?
There’s a tiger on the prowl.
Where danger lies unseen.
In the shadows of the night.
The darker side of me.
[instrumental outro]
Comments
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Carroll, did you put this in the wrong place?
Sid
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Yeah, I just moved it for Carroll so it can be viewed here.😀
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Great lyrics and it's hard to criticise this when the Ai when it works well like this. I wish it didn't but I just have to get over it! Yeah, a great song.😀
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Very nice indeed. Strong lyrics, and the music came out well too.
Good stuff.
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Enjoyed that Carroll, another good one.
Well done,
Sid
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I dont typically hear rhythms of music when writing or reading lyrics, but I feel and sense the music in this one0
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Very well put together and the choice of words immerses the listener/reader guiding them along through the songs natural evolution. (forgive me if my terminology is wrong, I speak as a poet) I really liked the lyrics and how they balanced good and bad. Your metaphors seamlessly melded into each other, Chains/Tug-o-War etc. Really choice piece.
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I think this is really good. If I had to flag anything, there may be opportunity to build on the "tug of war" part in a bridge, better comparing who you want to be vs this "darker side of me".
At first I wasn't sure how I felt about the "tiger on the prowl" since I usually more commonly hear lion. But after more thought, I like it since tigers are typically more solitary cats. Idk if that's what you were going for or if it's just your cat of choice, but it works.
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