The wolf
Verse
I’m bar hopping, girl shopping.
Painting this town red.
I’m gonna party hearty
With old Johnny Red.
Pre chorus
Lock up your daughters,
Your sisters, your wives.
Tonight’s a full moon.
I’ve got hungry eyes.
Chorus
Its Friday its payday
And I’m cutting loose.
Girls you better look out
The wolf’s on the loose.
Verse
I’m out dancing, romancing.
Having a good time.
I’ll buy the senoritas
Tequila and lime.
Pre chorus
Lock up your daughters,
Your sisters, your wives.
Tonight’s a full moon.
I’ve got hungry eyes.
Chorus
Its Friday its payday
And I’m cutting loose.
Girls you better look out
The wolf’s on the loose.
Verse
I’m bar hopping, girl shopping.
I’m ready to howl
I’m out drinking, carousing
The wolf’s on the prowl.
Tag
Ow woo, ow woo
He’s coming for you.
Comments
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First, sorry I don't review more of your words Carroll..I'm just not so good at reviewing lyrics. But this one caught my eye. I can imagine this as a real good-time party song. It would probably work in a number of different musical styles. Me being me, I'd probably turn it into some kind of bar-room rocker but I can also imagine it as a tongue-in-cheek country song. Indeed, 'Lock up your daughters'!!😁
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You’re free to have a go at it if you wish0
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No promises Caroll, but I might give it a try.
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Lot's of energy, and a good strong rhythm. Upbeat country is how I hear it.
Love those opening lines, it sets up such a powerful groove:
I’m bar hopping, girl shopping.
Painting this town red.
and I think you should mirror that pattern in the next 2 lines, at the moment the syllables don't quite lines up, so maybe:
I’m gonna party, real hearty
with old Johnny Red
And similarly in verse 2:
I'll buy tequilas, for all the senoritas -though that will require a change on the next line too to avoid a repeat on tequila
In the final verse I don't think 'carousing' is close enough to 'drinking' to make that rhyme work, though it's close to 'prowl'.
I'd try to work the internal rhyme feel into the chorus too and add another line to match:
Girls you better look out
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This isn't the most intense or meaningful lyric you've written - but I think it will make a fine song!
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Some you have to write for fun0
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Fun song , I'd use , I'm coming for you , your switching pro nouns
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Hi Carroll,
"Some you have to write for fun"
As someone who is partial to a fun song or five, loved it.
I find fun songs are good R & R from the more serious stuff.
Same high standard though.
Sid
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