bottle of vintage wine - new version
Version 1: Suno prompt: Female vocal, sultry ballad
Version 2: Collab with RainyDayMan
https://soundcloud.com/rainydayman/bottle-of-vintage-wine
[intro]
[verse 1]
He used me, till there's nothing left,
the shell of a long lost Aphrodite.
Dressing slowly in the darkness,
afraid of any weakness I might see.
To quench his thirst the next time,
like a bottle of vintage wine.
[verse 2]
Wearing a previous lover's finery,
the white fur of an Arctic Fox.
Today's Gala needs to be just right,
I'm a plus-one like Goldilocks.
An expensive taste, said she's all mine,
like a bottle of vintage wine.
[verse 3]
I mingled and did some small-talk,
he closed some deals with the boys.
After the cigars and brandys,
It was time to play with the toys.
The girls came in and stood in line,
like bottles of vintage wine.
[bridge]
It never crossed his mind, that people don't like being used.
Treat a person like a doormat, and still it's being abused.
[verse 4]
I recorded every shady deal and everyone he bribed.
No one gave a second thought, to me and my small-talk.
I was one of them, so everything just flowed.
The Met got the evidence, they'd be doing their "Perp Walk".
He's finally facing the people, a liar and a swindler, ,
even a vintage wine can go off, and turn itself to vinegar.
[outro]
turn itself to vinegar
turn itself to vinegar
Comments
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I should be working instead of bad jokes and listening
but that sounds damn real and a good song
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Why do you have it private ? make it public , some one will listen
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What a fantastic lyric! I really like this one. Sultry, smoky, seductive.
And in the end, powerful and bitter. Good story, and so much atmosphere.
I don't think the AI has quite got it right with the mood on this one. Needs more of a jazz vibe to it. And it's a bit too 'nice' and clean. Needs some dirt in it.
But a wonderful lyric!
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Interesting, the characters I had in mind for this were Jessica Rabbit (Who Killed Roger) and Warren Beatty.
Jazz/Blues genre might have suited better. Could I trouble you to expand on this comment, "And it's a bit too 'nice' and clean. Needs some dirt in it." I'm really interested.
Thanks
Sid
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Well, I think it's too melodic. It needs some bluesy type notes to give it that sultry edge.
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Gotcha! thanks for that.
I'm planning to build up a library of prompts to hone in a bit better on the mood.
What you've given me will be useful
Sid
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Sid, would you mind if I took a crack at an alternate version?
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I would be honoured, please be my guest.
I look forward to hearing it.
P.S. make changes to the lyrics as you see fit.
Sid
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Version 2 of this song that Sid and I have been working on (and having a blast!)
Bottle of Vintage Wine
Link to music: https://soundcloud.com/rainydayman/bottle-of-vintage-wine
[intro]
[verse 1]
He used me, till there's nothing left,
the shell of a long lost Aphrodite.
Dressing slowly in the darkness,
afraid of any weakness I might see.
To quench his thirst the next time,
like a bottle of vintage wine.
[verse 2]
Wearing a previous lover's finery,
the white fur of an Arctic Fox.
Today's Gala needs to be just right,
I'm a plus-one like Goldilocks.
An expensive taste, said she's all mine,
like a bottle of vintage wine.
[Break]
[verse 3]
I mingled and did some small-talk,
He closed some deals with the boys.
After the cigars and brandies,
It was time to play with the toys.
The girls came in and stood in line,
like bottles of vintage wine.
[bridge]
It never crossed his mind, that people don't like being used.
Treat a person like a doormat, and it's still being abused.
[verse 4]
I recorded every shady deal
and everyone he bribed.
No one gave a second thought to me
To them, I was one of the tribe
They poured their secrets out,
like bottles of vintage wine.
[bridge 2]
Another goddess came along so he dumped me for her ,
even a vintage wine can go off, and turn to vinegar.
[verse 5]
Used me, till there was nothing left,
Abandoned without a thought
I gave the cops all my evidence,
Now they're doing their "Perp Walk"
They can all lie in a cell an’ age
Like bottles of vintage wine
[Outro]
Turn itself to vinegar
Like bottles of vintage wine
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No doubt in my mind that your AI version really does sound sweet. Honestly, I wouldn't know if you hadn't told us.
But you know what's coming here!!😉 RDM's arrangement does everything for me that AI can't do - yet. It has soul and it's just fabulous. I'm loving the smokey, jazzy feel and the chord progressions and the delivery is exactly what Owen does best. Of course it helps that he had such good lyrics to work with. You know I'm a fan Sid. This is a great collaboration guys.
Made my day - in more ways than one!😀
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That it made your day is enough for me Chris
Sid
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Hey guys
good job on this , keep em coming
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