BIRD
BIRD
You‘re always on the run. A‘
But you don’t seem to move
Driven by wanderlust
But you’re homesick every day
Your clear mind seems to know
Your guts won’t understand
Wise words come from your lips
You’re eyes won’t see the way
So colourful and smart. A+
But to shy to be seen
And when you better stay
You run away inside
Daydreams won’t ease your mind
But let illusions grow
Love to hide behind them
But they’re no truthful guide
Like a bird unable to fly B
Don’t know how, unsure about the why
You’re like a bird unable to fly
But I see that you try, try, try
Like a bird unable to fly
Who is continuously watching the wide sky
Take a rest. C
Have a break
Let fresh air flow through your chest
Take a rest
Have a break
You truly try your best
I know you truly try your best
You’re always on the run A*
But you don’t seem to move
Driven by wanderlust
But you’re homesick every day
Your soul can’t find a way….
©️by Ian P./ 08.04.2024/ for: VALENTINE+B
You‘re always on the run. A‘
But you don’t seem to move
Driven by wanderlust
But you’re homesick every day
Your clear mind seems to know
Your guts won’t understand
Wise words come from your lips
You’re eyes won’t see the way
So colourful and smart. A+
But to shy to be seen
And when you better stay
You run away inside
Daydreams won’t ease your mind
But let illusions grow
Love to hide behind them
But they’re no truthful guide
Like a bird unable to fly B
Don’t know how, unsure about the why
You’re like a bird unable to fly
But I see that you try, try, try
Like a bird unable to fly
Who is continuously watching the wide sky
Take a rest. C
Have a break
Let fresh air flow through your chest
Take a rest
Have a break
You truly try your best
I know you truly try your best
You’re always on the run A*
But you don’t seem to move
Driven by wanderlust
But you’re homesick every day
Your soul can’t find a way….
©️by Ian P./ 08.04.2024/ for: VALENTINE+B
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Comments
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I like the mood, and the meaning.
I'm wondering if the "bird" metaphor could be a bit more front and center without overdoing it? I'm seeing references to it with "So colourful and smart" and "Wise words come from your lips" but it's quite low key at the moment in those first two verses. And it seems like an opportunity to use it more.
But the message is coming through very nicely.
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Thanks Owen!
Now that I read your comment, I understand what you mean. I’ll think it over. Infact this is the first I’ve written in a year and I was surprised that it all still came out that „well“. But if you are to busy with yourself, own sickness and all that stuff it’s very hard to focus.
Anyway thanks again for takin the time and reading it as well as your feedback!
Ian0
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