Angel

It happened on a cold, November night
even the moon, was hidden from site
I was sitting in a bar, on the edge of town
reminiscing, slowly getting quite down
Chorus
I knew as you walked into the room
my friends, said it was far too soon
but I knew, but I knew
my life would never be the same
there were half a dozen losers like me
drowning themselves, but they weren't at sea
all with a story, of failure to tell
all with a past, where they had seen hell
Chorus
I knew as you walked into the room
my friends, said it was far too soon
but I knew, but I knew
how love felt, at first site felt
your beauty covered, all the cracks- in my heart
I wasn't crazy enough to think, I had a chance
just looking and watching, made my heart dance
Chorus
I knew as you walked into the room
my friends, said it was far too soon
but I knew, but I knew
I'd seen an angel, without wings
I finished my drink, a spring in my step
most nights, I'd go home and weep
I wasn't to know, this was my last
and that we would meet, deep in my sleep
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Katie, What an absolutely beautiful song, I love those endings that catch you out, definitely wasn't expecting that.
That'll do for now because I want to go back and read it again.
Any musicians out there want to do this justice?
Sid
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Love the twist in the ending, I didn't see that coming!
My favorite line: drowning themselves, but they weren't at sea
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Yes, this one is fabulous. Like RDM, the ending caught me out too. Very clever and the makings of a great song I reckon.
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Thank you everyone for your kind words, please feel free to use it if you can do something with it.
I have started basing my lyrics on finding a chorus, and building it from there
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Beautiful lyric. I like the bitter sweetness of it... Do you play an instrument? It's very easy to pluck out basic guitar chords on a baritone Uke...
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I have an acoustic guitar, I know the main chords. I'm not very good at strumming, I don't understand scales and keys..
I would record something but the microphone on my Amazon fire is pretty useless and thank you
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Ok cool. This is worth you pursuing if you have like 15-20 min a day to work with it. You don't have to know much theory. Just what chords go together. Like Cmajor goes with Fmajor, Gmajor, Aminor, Dminor, Eminor. Then with a capo you can sing in whatever key and switch capo, as needed. My 2 cents. Haha! I'm such a cheerleader for people learning to accompany themselves. If you have a cell phone those work great with a voice memo app.
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Thanks for the advice, I think I shall stick to the writing side lol
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