Moonshine
Moonshine
Verse 1 (Slow-Tempo, romantic melody;
Mix of Country acoustic guitars and pedal steel with piano and R&B/Soul)
Girl, you know I love the sun, but I want something new
The daytime’s for playing, the night time’s for loving on you
We can order in and pour a glass of wine
The sun’s gone down, the sky’s dark, it’s time
Chorus:
We don’t need to go out, we can stay right here
You know I’d be lost if you weren’t here
Turn off the lights so no one can see us make love
Let’s just stay here tonight and let the moonshine down on us
Verse 2:
When you had a long day and you just wanna let go
Just look at the stars and let them soothe your soul
Don’t let the worries of the world get into our bedroom
Let’s just hold each other and slow dance with the moon
Chorus:
Bridge:
Right here
This is where I always be
Tell me that you still feel the same
After the sun comes up
Chorus:
Comments
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Catchy lyrics, @JT424! I can imagine a country melody for this one. The moon is always an interesting topic for songs. I composed a couple of songs about the moon years ago and made demos for both. One is called Moonburn (as opposed to a sunburn), and the other is called Daytime Moon. Both were love songs about being with a beautiful girl under the moon, day or night. Again, nice job with this one! 😀 How many songs do you have for your new album, Dark, Beautiful World?
Cheers,
Joseph
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15 total. I have one more single I will be sharing next Wednesday and the whole album will be out in March, and I will be releasing a song each day up until it's release. I've released some songs/singles already if you want to check them out.1
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Great stuff. How do we check out your songs? Forgive me, I may have missed a link somewhere? I'm keen to take a listen.
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That's great! I look forward to your next song next Wednesday! 😀
Cheers,
Joseph
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Ah..I get it! Thanks for the info.😀
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I like this0
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Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed the song very much, nice realism. I also like the concept of a virtual album, ingenious!
One minor point. if i may, try to avoid the repetitive use of the same word in different lines of the same section.
chorus "here"
verse 2 "let"
I tend to do the same thing when I am in full flow. I now proof read each section immediately after I write it, that helps.
Thanks again
Sid
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I like the song overall, but this line bugs me:
Girl, you know I love the sun, but I want something new
cause people really don't want something instead of the sun, they want something in addition.
Maybe you could go more like:
Girl you know I like the sun, but I love the moonlight too
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Nice work, JT! I like how you really serve up the sensual pleasures in this song. It's got some very cool ideas.
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