Over You (repost)
i think I had posted this on the old site...
...however, something odd with this song. I have it posted on Audiomack and it is by far my most played track there - there are usually 2-3 new plays a week, and geographically they are all over the world. It may be a glitch, but thought I'd repost this here.
Some other background... this song dates to 1984(!!!)
OVER YOU
Over you do you think I'd fall
Over you do you think I'd crawl
Over you do you think I'd fall back over you
not over you
Over you do you think I'd lie
Over you do you think I'd die
Over you do you think I'd cry out
Over you not over
I would do anything to let myself down
Easy
I'd make all the right moves out on the town
So you could see
And if I'd happen to see you around
Do you think I'd hide out over you
Tear my pride out over you
Won't be denied now not over you
Not over you not over you
I would do anything to not make the same
Big mistake
You thought I was sleeping
but now I'm wide awake
Over you do you think I'd
Give up on love
Over you when
Push comes to shove
Over you would I rise above
Up over you yes up over you
Comments
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I don't think I've heard this one before. I like the song and the arrangement is okay in the main. In terms of rhythm however it is rather disjointed/out of sync in places. Consequently the vocal sounds a bit unsure at times. It's also a bit repetitive.
I'd say that, as a demo, this gets the song over well enough. It would be well worth revisiting in my opinion.😀
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I think you've composed a good song. Your style reminds me a little of Joe Jackson from the 80s. I hope you get back to this one and develop it.
Cheers,
Joseph
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This is so far from good. Other's are being nice. Out of time. Singing sounds like a dog that got shot. I don't get how anyone liked this... Are you a beginner? The responses make me rethink any feed back from the posted members as genuine.
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@Autopart101 Negative feedback on songs is acceptable, and can be helpful, but should still be respectful, and when possible constructive, meaning with specific suggestions on how to improve
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How to improve this song. Delete it.
#1. Specific suggestion- Sing the song in key.
#2. play the song in time. Keyboard part is so out of time.
#3. This is just a spoken word song with no melody. ( Songs have Melody's) The writer has no ear and does not understand Music at all.
Joe
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@Autopart101 Ooh, that's very harsh Joe. You don't have to like every contribution here, but I would never tell anyone to delete their song.
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@Autopart101 The aim of this forum is to help others with their songwriting. Consider whether receiving such a comment would help you with your songs, before posting it to others. Negative comments are acceptable, but if you having nothing helpful to say, consider saying nothing. Also, comments about a song are acceptable, comments about a songwriter are not
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Even as a non musician, I can see that this needs some work on it, but it also comes from a soul and needs to be shared.
Nobody Knows the circumstances that lead to someone writing such lyrics, and the place that they come from.
Ok it's not great in some peoples eyes, but we are all here learn, improve and hopefully grow as Individuals -all on our own journeys.
Lyrics and music are a way of expressing ourselves. Some are able to do that better than others. I hope that people might might make positive criticisms and remarks and suggestions that others can take away and use- and next time there will be an improvement.
How good would that feel to help on another's journey.
As for a review, there's clearly a lot of feeling in the lyrics .
Keep writing and playing
Katie x
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Sometimes the Truth needs to be told. Everyone that listened to that song feels as I posted. They just do not have the courage to post what needs to be said. This kind of criticism can help people realize the truth. A harsh review of my songs/clips would not stop me from returning. I do enjoy most of what is posted. There are members that are pros on this forum. They can play, write and sing. That's why I keep coming back!
Much Love
Joe
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Everyone that listened to that song feels as I posted. They just do not have the courage to post what needs to be said.
Has anything been bothering you lately, Joe? You used to be a cool poster and contributor, but something changed with you over the last six months or so. I sincerely hope you get better and improve from whatever's troubling you.
Regarding your comments, "everyone" clearly does not "feel" the same as you about the song. I judged the song itself, not the performance. I do not appreciate being called a liar. This isn't the first time you suggested that those who disagree with you are dishonest liars. You do not have the right to speak for anyone else. Also, please do not confuse stupidity, childish uncoothness, and the ability to post diatribes of hate against @jgkojak2 from the safety of your living room with "courage". It's easy to hide behind a keyboard and run one's mouth. That requires no courage. Instead, why not just ignore those you do not like, or simply offer courteous suggestions for improvement? It's very easy to simply pass over posts and not respond to annoying posts, content, and/or posters you do not like.
So lighten up, post a good song we can enjoy, and lay off with the attacks on @jgkojak2.
Remember, this is a songwriters forum, not a "final version, spit and polished, radio-ready song" forum. Some people can write decent songs, but can't sing in tune or in time. For example, Rod Temperton wrote numerous big hits, but he couldn't sing. Know the difference.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y2vj3YoEzOQ
Cheers,
Joseph
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Closing this thread, as it has gone well off-topic and is no longer constructive.
Joe, we can continue this conversation privately if you wish.
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