My raw lyrics
she spoke to the petals,
A love like a blossom,
where promises settle.
Her voice, a melody,
caressed the air,
Telling the flowers the secrets they share.
He listened, enraptured, in a meadow of dreams,
Responding in blooms, his love brightly gleams.
Each petal, a promise, tenderly exchanged,
Their love story in blossoms forever arranged.
Underneath the moon, their words took flight,
As the floral confessions embraced the night.
He vowed through roses, she swore with daisies,
A love so sincere, it danced with the breezes.
In the language of flowers, their tale unfolds,
A symphony of colors, a love story to be told.
He said it with lilies, she with a tulip shower,
In this floral romance, love blooms every hour.
Comments
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I have a great tune I can share with you, with piano notes1
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That's not bad at all, Its "Really good!" You might want to take another look at the line ending "Breezes." It doesn't quite fit rhyming scheme you have for the rest. But then again, it might just fit well with the music. Do you have it as a backing track?
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Very nice lyrics. They flow really well for me. I'd like to hear the tune in whatever format you have it. Work in progress and it's looking promising I think.😀
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This is really nice. I like the continuity of the metaphor throughout.
You haven't listed a title. If you are still looking for one maybe "The language of flowers" would work.
I particularly liked these lines:
A love like a blossom,
where promises settle.
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I agree with the other comments in the forum. Nice work. What's the title of your song? I look forwward to hearing it set to music.
Cheers,
Joseph
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