Stay Forever
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A great song in the making. I can certainly imagine this being worked into a full band arrangement with guitars, bass, drums and possibly keys. As is stands it's a good listen even if it ends a bit abruptly. I enjoyed this.😀
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Agree with Chris.
Very enjoyable and catchy song.
Love your singing.
Thank you for sharing this beauty.
With respect,
Rene
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I think the bones of the song are all there. I'd look to add a solo or a bridge after what you already have just to add some variety. You might also think about how to vary the dynamics a little more (soft/hard) just to keep the listener guessing what's coming next. But I like where you are at so far.
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"I'm a simple man", very nicely sang.
I like the way you strum the guitar, and the sound is good.
The vibe is of pure songwriting which I found highly enjoyable and inspiring.
Great energy performance.
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I enjoyed the listen. it is catchy and I like your performance. I would like to have the lyrics so I can read as I listen. It's a lovely song, but the end is abrupt.
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I tried catching the lyrics but it sounds like you haven't' quite established them yet. Seems you are still fleshing this one out.
You have the makings of a good song here, I look forward to hearing the finished product.
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Good stuff man! Great little demo.
I agree with others that this deserves the full production treatment.
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@Autopart101 . . . as a song, I really like what you have so far, "Simple Man" concept really works well, and the other lyrics you have really support that . . . for current presentation, maybe up the presence of the vocal, and dip some 100 hz on the guitar . . . thanks for sharing here, and I offer my sincere encouragement to keep working this one !
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This was recorded with 1 Mic vocals as I played.
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Let go on like this forever
We should stay like this together
Is tonight for love or pressure
I'm a simple man, with my hart on my sleeve in my hand
I'm a simple man, are you my Wife, my Girl, my Friend
Lets make this life together
Lets make this life forever
Lets stay like this my love forever
I'm a simple man, with my hart on my sleeve in my hand
I'm a simple man, are you my Wife, my Girl, my Friend
Lets live like this my love forever
You'll be my wife and live together
Lets not fight and stay together
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