Rewrite

hi everyone i rewrote my text
lost and found.
it has changed a bit. so also the title. but it has remained country


reverend’s wife






VERSE



There is nothing new under the sun

Just a smoking trail where i had gone

All the blackbirds kept still

As i walked my way up boot hill

Every stone my boot turned

Snapped like a fire is burnt

Snapped like a fire is burnt



CHORUS



I guess it’s the road to hell

I know it too far and to well

Course every time i go down

Hole in my heart stone in the ground

Hole in my heart stone in the ground



VERSE



One night jane stood at my door

She sad i don’t love my man no more

So there stood i in the night

Alone with the reverend’s wife

Clouds shatters moonlight that night

My love made me blind

My love made me blind



CHORUS





I guess it’s the road to hell

For what i’m gonna tell

Every time jane came round

a ring of fire burnt the ground

a ring of fire burnt the ground



VERSE



All the lizards crawled down

As word spread true town

They called her a child from hell

A hooker a jezebel

So they slowly casted their spell

So they slowly casted their spell



CHORUS



I guess it’s the road to hell

For what I’m now gonna tell

The night jane didn’t came round

I found her hanging six inch of the ground

I found her hanging six inch of the ground



VERSE



Words of the past carved in stone

Now rest upon her bones

I.m seeing smoke behind the sun

o lord what have i done

o lord what have i done

o lord she’s gone



CHORUS



I guess it’s the road to hell

I know it to far and to well

Course every time i go down

Hole in my heart stone on the ground

A stone fell through my heart ……

to the ground





And Yes it is grim

Comments

  • My level of English is low, I almost always use the same words hahaha, that's why I can't criticize or help you with your lyric, but I can tell you that I like it. @rewrite

  • mora thanks for your response
    I use Google Translate a lot, which doesn't always work well, because the structure of sentences in Dutch is different than in English. That will also be the case from Spanish to English, but it will never stop me.
    I still have to see when I can record it, but that will be fine. The music is ready.
  • Nice! I particularly like: "Hole in my heart stone in the ground"

    Just a few typos:

    As word spread true town ➡️ As word spread through town

    So they slowly casted their spell ➡️ So they slowly cast their spell

    six inch of the ground ➡️ six inches off the ground, (though "inch" still sounds good even if it's not grammatically correct)

    I know it to far and to well ➡️ I know it too far and too well

    Course every time i go down ➡️ 'Cause every time i go down

  • remfire
    edited September 2023
    Thank you rainydayman l'll rejust this
    And record it .course the music fits like glove now .i'm very happy how it worked out .you'll hear.ha ha
    My new guitar is done today
    And it sounds great .it fits my voice
    Made whit a ash top and back mahony sides and a purple wood
    Neck .fretboard from tygerwood
    It stiil need some rejusting but it
    Be oke in a while.
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