The Peace I Thought I'd Found

A little bit of sibilance I need to tame towards the end but otherwise I think this is finished. Largely another 3/4 song - I recently retuned my 12 string (first time in years) and I seem to have got stuck in folky 3/4 time for recent songs! 😁


https://on.soundcloud.com/2Vvui


When I was a babe

Playing with my toes safe and sound

I never thought that I’d walk

From the settee to my daddy without falling down

I know, it seems just crazy

That I thought it would stay just the same


So don’t tell me, I know

The time it takes to grow

Is too short

And what’s left is much less

The peace, I thought I’d found

Has moved beneath the ground

And I fear I’ll join it some day


The more you look - it moves

Like paving beneath your shoes

It’s bonkers

And so the more you try

The more you cry

The more you hope

The worse you cope

It’s bonkers


I like the box to keep my corpse

Warm inside

I crave the grave to hold me still

And warm inside


Rise and open your

Rise and open your eyes


Listen to the silence that screams

Throw away desires and dreams

Let all your hope drain away

Don’t heed what they have to say

They’ll ignore you to death

Don’t forget to mention Macbeth

And as the final curtain falls

You’ll be safe in four walls


I guess you’ve got to fall down

So you can look up at the stars

So many bright lights

At a distance so far

Out of reach

Maybe our children

Will make it there one day

Maybe they’ll put us in our place

And not let us fade away


So, don’t tell me

I know

The time it takes to grow

Is too short

And what’s left?

Much less

The peace, I thought I’d found

Has moved beneath the ground

And I fear I’ll join it

Someday

Comments

  • Nothing wrong with folky 3/4 time !

    There are parts of this that I like, and parts I don't.

    From "The more you look - it moves" through until "You’ll be safe in four walls" I like. That darker vibe works for me.

    The first verse doesn't ring true to me. I'm not sure toddlers have such coherent thoughts, and it all feels a bit twee. But perhaps that's just me and others will just find it cute.

    The 2nd (and final) verse doesn't feel strong enough, it lacks punch.

    But the middle part feels strong to me. And I like what you're doing with the double vocals.

  • MoraAmaroLaLoba
    MoraAmaroLaLoba Madrid (Spain)

    I like your waltz and the chosen tempo is great to tell-sing the story. I like the lyrics very, very much, they are really deep and touching even though they are hidden under the makeup you have put on them!!!

    I'm glad you have the 12-string guitar in your hands again, there's a reason for everything,you've given it back the usefulness and importance it had at the time, right?

    very nice work @CorkingCrackBand

  • Hi @RainyDayMan


    Thanks for your thoughts. 🙂


    Hi @MoraAmaroLaLoba


    I'm really glad you liked the lyrics. I think they're rather profound and multifaceted. It's funny about not touching an instrument for a while and then 'reconnecting'. It's a little like time travel... I imagine. 😁


    Cheers both of you.


    CCB

  • Hey there Lee.......Love the song. The writing, singing (reminds me of Roger Waters) and the music are great.

    You are one talented guy.

    I must ask...is this a solo effort by you, or do you have an actual band that you work with?

  • I just wanted to reiterate on how much I like this whole song and production. I'm not able to edit my original post, so I'll make another.

    This is sublime!

  • Hi @IronKnee


    Thanks for stopping by. Press release: The Corking Crack Band, formed in 1964 somewhere near the Yukatan Peninsuka by founding member Cuthbert Bloodrash (Bass, Vocals), Ted 'Teeny' Rogers (Rhythm Guitar, Vocals), Leopold Neverwinkle ('air'), Brian Toberman (Harpsichord) and... so on...

    ... but for you Tom: the truth - It's just little old me up here. If I ever work with anyone, I ensure I credit them fully as possible. 🙂


    I'm glad you liked the song. 👍️


    CCB

  • Very lovely and nostalgic in feeling. Childhood innocence recalled, home and hearth. These are all things that make us feel safe and sound. Beautiful song over all. The 3/4 time makes it all the more charming. Thank you for sharing your achievement.

  • Hi @highvibrational


    I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for listening and commenting.


    CCB

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