The Lady On The Lake
Hello again. 😀
Rare for me, a relatively stripped back song.
https://on.soundcloud.com/XL3Eu
I saw a lady on the water, on the lake
She seemed to whisper something softly
Swallows lost on the wing
Water like glass, a boat broken through
It seemed to drift but never move
I try to tread on wet and blue
To take my place beside you
But the world rises through my feet
And I swallow and swallow
I heard the lady call for me
Plead for me
Scream for me
But she never came
I tried to pull the surface near
To rise beyond the fear
To move the world, to once more breath the air
And I gasp
I gasp
In every death
I once saw a lady.
Comments
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No complaints about the lyrics this time(!!)..Gotta say really I really like this one. It's kinda haunting. I really like the sparse arrangement and particularly like the underlying riff. Really well produced too. You're fearless with your vocals! Yeah, this is a great track.😀
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That's beautiful! Love those drawn out vocals, gives it such atmosphere.
The simpler musical treatment is completely appropriate for this one. I like the xylophone like break in there too.
@ChrisPrice said "haunting" and that's exactly the right phrase for it.
So is this about someone drowning?
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Sounds good man, Your voice shines on this . Haunting tune
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It's been a while since I posted here, but this brought me back.
Awesome track. Great atmosphere!
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@CorkingCrackBand . . . Super piece ! . . . less was way more in this case . . . and really like the way you "punctuated" it with those low rumbles, gave me quite an aqua vibe. I think your vocal and melody are excellent here, and there is a very wide range (low to high) you're displaying in this one, highlighting your very unique singing voice (especially in the high register) There are places where the pronunciation gets lost into the deep, but probably you can't crank the high end without taking from the mood and the thickness of it all. Great lyrical flow, tied nicely to the music . . . yes, I really enjoyed this one !
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Hi @RainyDayMan @ChrisPrice @ElvisNash @samiamiamsam @popitup
Thanks for the feedback. Very much an atmospheric folk song - 'haunting' is a apposite descriptor. I'm still half inclined to add a little more textual sound - not music but maybe a wisp of wind etc. We'll see if I muster the energy to do it and it would need to be tastefully done to not spoil the simple, vocal centred sound I've gone for. I have however added, a few hours ago, a little light organ to the outro to just tweak the end of song dynamic. I think it's tastefully done to not detract.
Thank you all so much for taking the time to listen and comment,
CCB
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Nice. I really enjoyed this one. Very interesting song. I don't quite understand the significance of everything described in the song yet, but I really appreciated the lyrical way in which the drowning, which wasn't I sure a real drowning or not, was described. Very poetic and very mysterious.
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Hi @schmalex
Thanks for the feedback. It's very much 'one of those songs' where it's for the listener to decide 'their' meaning (if they so wish). I obviously have my meaning but it's written now so it is what it will be to others.
Thanks,
CCB
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When I lived in Lake Tahoe , there was a mountain, if you got stoned enough you'd see the lady of the lake on that mountain top
We were on north shore the mountain was south shore , With the lake in the middle . And your song reminded me of that , We lived on a horse curve in the road , We'd bet who would slide off the road and hit a snow berm while smoking pot and playing guitar .We played a Ski resort , the manager said we sucked , Next week he was killed in a avalache at that resort
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As I already told you in another forum, it seems to me to be a wonderful, delicate song, I love the depth of the sound and the atmosphere it creates, enveloping softness and words that paint scenes full of Haunting brushstrokes @CorkingCrackBand
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Hi @ElvisNash
"Next week he was killed in a avalache at that resort"
You stick to that avalanche story bud - they'll never catch you. 😁
Thanks, that's a lovely little review. 😉
Thanks for listening and commenting,
CCB
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ha ha right . That was 45 years ago statue of limitations
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