Holes
This is an AI production that adheres to the original in a covered work. This is a cover of an existing song that closely follows the original's melody, lyrics, and structure. It maintains the core elements and essence of the original work while adding a high production value and, in some instances, various instrumentations. Above all, as the author of this song, I want to make clear that this production respects the original composition entirely.
This may be a bit personal, but maybe some could relate. it's about temptation, sin, guilt and the struggles with overcoming the wretchedness within 😀Sound like fun... Tell me what you think?
“Holes"
Words & Music By Tom Tognaci
https://soundclick.com/song/15236516
Ohio’s surely something in the early Autumn rain
There’s a truth in this quiet, beautiful refrain
But as my mind a ‘wanders through the splendor and the grace
There’s a darker truth, deep inside, I must face
… And there, I’ll stumble and fall
I’m always pulled by the guilt, picking at my craw
And to my great shame in it all
Pride digs a hole in me that no bottle can fill
And it’s over myself I fall
….in my own holes
It’s a slow walk to Heaven on the detours that I take
I can’t bear this old cross not even for my sake
‘Cause no man’s cross is carried when he’s leaning on a crutch
All it ever takes is just one little touch…
… And there, I’ll stumble and fall
I’m always pulled by the guilt, picking at my craw
And to my great shame in it all
Pride digs a hole in me that no bottle can fill
And it’s over myself I fall
….in my own holes
Oh Lord, how I’ve tried changing from the inside.
I’ve taken it day by day, but where did all the time go?
Oh, Lord, keep me strong, when I cannot go on.
I’ve yet to hit the rock, that keeps me from that deeper hole.
Ohio’s surely something in the early Autumn rain
There’s a truth in this quiet, beautiful refrain
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Your signature guitar style and melodies are all over this!
It's a reflective, honest song without feeling self-indulgent.
You might try a tiny pause after the 2nd line in each verse, just a bar to hold it a touch. Except maybe the last where the dynamic lifts.
It’s a slow walk to Heaven on the detours that I take
I like that line! Says a lot - the destination, and the problems getting there!
I enjoyed that. I think a lot of people will.
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Thanks, Rainy... For me, the most important line is: "No man's cross is carried, when he's leaning on a crutch".
That was the idea that bore this song. "The crutch" pulls our attentions, leads us astray. It's step ONE in getting things straight 😎
I'm glad you liked it... I can only hope others will find something in there, as well.
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Got lots of listens... no one cares to comment?
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Powerful, reflective, and descriptive right from the opening—“Ohio in the early autumn rain.” That line really sets the tone and pulls the listener in immediately. The central idea of wrestling with guilt and pride comes through clearly, and the “holes” concept works as a strong, cohesive metaphor throughout.
The line “pride digs a hole in me that no bottle can fill” really stands out—super vivid and memorable. The sense of struggle is also well carried in the bridge. You could even bring in another specific image there to match the uniqueness of the verses—but not really necessary, just a thought.
I know you mentioned this is personal, so just sharing from a listener’s perspective—overall it feels honest, grounded, and thoughtfully put together. The themes come across as very relatable, whether viewed through a religious lens or more broadly. I also really like the song you created with Suno—it complements the lyric well.
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Thanks for posting, pistol. I appreciate it. I'm happy you get what I'm trying to convey. My only clarification is that Suno did not write the melody, the lyric, nor the music. It only plays it to its upmost. I, pretty much always, build the lyrics as I write the melody and guitar music.
Anyways, this place can be really slow at times, dominated by a lot of chatter.
It is slow here. These music sites, like the one here, used to be a bastion of music and enthusiasm. Today, you see it how it is. I'm happy to see a new face... a new positive and good-natured face.
If you are having trouble posting music here, I can help you with a Soundclick account. TSF does not have an upload feature to present your music on the site. You would have to post a URL of an existing music site.
Let me know 😎
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