I've Got Demon Angels
https://suno.com/song/4d7d5068-1af3-4088-86e0-a473ca78e4bf
I was thinking what Bill said yesterday on outlaws
The cartel show , said he demon angels instead of angelic angels
Verse 1
There’s a shadow in the corner where the bottle used to be
Says he’s been here longer than my memory
Got a laugh like trouble and a smoker’s cough
He don’t say much, but he don’t back off
There’s another one humming every bad idea
Says “you made it this far, don’t get clean in here”
Every time I almost put the past to rest
They start talking louder than what’s left
Chorus
I got demon angels watching over me
They don’t pray, they just don’t let me sleep
They ain’t holy, but they kept me free
When the good ones gave up on me
Yeah heaven never picked up the phone
Hell’s the only place that knows me
I got demon angels watching over me
Verse 2
One’s got a voice like a barroom fight
Keeps striking matches in the night
Says “don’t you dare try settling down
Peace like that’ll get you in the ground”
Another one sounds like a man I knew
Half regret and a little truth
Says “you ain’t built for the straight and narrow
You’ll just dig yourself a deeper hole”
Chorus
I got demon angels watching over me
They don’t pray, they just don’t let me sleep
They ain’t holy, but they kept me free
When the good ones gave up on me
Yeah heaven never picked up the phone
Hell’s the only place that knows me
I got demon angels watching over me
Bridge
They don’t wear halos…
Just scars I recognize
Laugh when I try changing—
Keep me right here in the fire
Final Chorus (lifted)
I got demon angels watching over me
Yeah they drag me back when I try to leave
They ain’t saving anything
They just won’t let me be
Yeah heaven never picked up the phone
Hell’s the only place that knows me
I got demon angels…
Still watching over me
Comments
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Elvis this is pure poetry and, in my opinion, the best thing you've written so far. It's honest and comes from the heart and soul :)
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A post chorus is cool when you can get away with it . Suno added that post chorus first , it works
Thanks Bill
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Every line points to the hook I'm a outlaw , its not a rule its essentials
Yes I studied with Marty Dodson a hit writer , you have to listen to someone it might as well be him
Brent Baxter another hit writer taught me on a post chorus
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I like this Elvis. The demon angels is a nice angle and you've made the most of it. I like how you describe the various types to explore the idea. And some lovely lines there, like the first one: "There’s a shadow in the corner where the bottle used to be" just implies so much.
This is good stuff.
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Some of these Cartel drug lords live to be old men , how I got the angle
Thanks
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on a side note . Shouldn't Aprils fools day be moved up to April 15th ? Seems more logical . We're going to rob you blind . just kidding . Aprils fool . Funny how fool fits nicely with the government
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