It was enough
It was enough
Verse
The old man rowed the boat
Toward the distant shore
His calloused leather hands
With firm grips on the oars.
She waved in the distance
Happy that he was home.
She’d baked an apple pie.
The stew was on the stove.
Chorus
He gave her yellow roses
A bottle of merlot.
She said, you didn’t have to
He replied, I did so.
He poured a couple glasses
They drank a toast to love.
She knew how much he loved her
For her it was enough.
Verse
The old man plowed his field
Harvested what he could.
Set aside some for seed
Then cut a cord of wood.
She waved from the farmhouse
For him to come and eat.
Her smile was like the shade
A refuge from the heat.
Chorus
He gave her yellow roses
A bottle of merlot.
She said, you didn’t have to
He replied, I did so.
He poured a couple glasses
They drank a toast to love.
She knew how much he loved her
For her it was enough.
Verse
She woke before the sunrise
But held him for a while.
When he woke she kissed him
And gave him a warm smile.
He whispered coffee please
She said go back to sleep.
You’re gonna need your rest
When you make love to me.
Bridge
Your work will have to wait today
We’ve got things to do.
Old man in case you haven’t guessed
I’m in love with you.
Comments
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Simple pleasures and love being enough. It's a good message.
Strong start, good visuals, a sense of place, and I like that you are showing rather than telling the simple things at first.
I'm wondering whether it should be "for them it was enough", but it sounds fine as it is.
Either "Set some aside for seed" or "Set aside some for seed" as you have it both work.
The classic country style is perfect for this. I enjoyed the listen. Nice write!
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I like the the lyrics especially towards the beginning. That kind of love is rare now a days. I was knocked out of the story by
"She said go back to sleep.
You’re gonna need your rest
When you make love to me."
There was such subtlety used linguistically before this. I'm curious if there's a softer/more subtle way of saying this. Love the country energy. Curious whether the chorus could be sharpened. I don't feel it has a linguistic hook.
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