The Future is Rosie

Domd
New Jersey
I don't do much country. I dint really know how to write country
It's country In that its a double hook. I thought at time id try to make it a country song. More of a pop country tune.
My lyrics into Ai
https://www.soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=15006302
Juan sittin on the fire escape
listenin to a Prince tape
through a flea market player he bought for 5 bucks
he's takin in the havoc
of rush hour traffic
just eatin some popcorn
damnin his luck
only one things different than the typical day
he see's the lovely Rosie comin his way
and the future is Rosie
there's a reason to smile
and angel moved in here
shes gonna live here for a while
like a drunk in the Bowery
who just found a key
push open the door
the future is Rosie
She's headin for the clothesline
laundry smellin so fine
spreadin nothin but sunshine
on the brick of this hood
and he thinks "life is worth livin
cause the signal shes been givin"
tells him somethins lying out there
and that somethins lookin good
still only one thing's different than the typical day
the two of them forgot about yesterday
and the future is Rosie
there's a reason to smile
and angel moved in here
shes gonna live here for a while
like a drunk in a Bowery
who just found a key
push open the door
the future is Rosie
Now, he's makin plans to get his GED
with Rosie on his side
there's no tellin what could be
and the future is Rosie
there's a reason to smile
and angel moved in here
shes gonna live here for a while
like a drunk in a Bowery
who just found a key
push open the door
the future is Rosie
It's country In that its a double hook. I thought at time id try to make it a country song. More of a pop country tune.
My lyrics into Ai
https://www.soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=15006302
Juan sittin on the fire escape
listenin to a Prince tape
through a flea market player he bought for 5 bucks
he's takin in the havoc
of rush hour traffic
just eatin some popcorn
damnin his luck
only one things different than the typical day
he see's the lovely Rosie comin his way
and the future is Rosie
there's a reason to smile
and angel moved in here
shes gonna live here for a while
like a drunk in the Bowery
who just found a key
push open the door
the future is Rosie
She's headin for the clothesline
laundry smellin so fine
spreadin nothin but sunshine
on the brick of this hood
and he thinks "life is worth livin
cause the signal shes been givin"
tells him somethins lying out there
and that somethins lookin good
still only one thing's different than the typical day
the two of them forgot about yesterday
and the future is Rosie
there's a reason to smile
and angel moved in here
shes gonna live here for a while
like a drunk in a Bowery
who just found a key
push open the door
the future is Rosie
Now, he's makin plans to get his GED
with Rosie on his side
there's no tellin what could be
and the future is Rosie
there's a reason to smile
and angel moved in here
shes gonna live here for a while
like a drunk in a Bowery
who just found a key
push open the door
the future is Rosie
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Comments
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Added different intro, couldn't get around that grand ole opry applause at end, not sure who would want that in their song0
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Bunp-1
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I like the conversational style of your lyric. Nice story.
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Thanks @IronKnee .
Started with the hook!0 -
"Future is Rosie" is a great hook!
I like the lyric. Good story, strong visuals and sense of place.
And I like the rhyming scheme.
Only thing I'd point to is that the start of the chorus seems to go down in energy/intensity compared to the verses, and it would typically be the other way 'round.
Enjoyed it!
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Thanks yeah I'm aware it doesn't go up into the chorus. After a few listens I got used to it. Sometimes what we expect and what we like to hear are different.0
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