The Storm Lyrics
I drive into the storm
It's dark and cloudy
Like my mind
How I feel about life
How i feel about life
<chorus>
Song blares
Man relates
As the tears fall down my face
As the tears fall down my face
<2nd verse>
Change the song,
And the twist and turn in the road,
I'm tired of always doing what I'm told
<chorus>
Song blares
Man relates
As the tears fall down my face
As the tears fall down my face
<bridge>
When can I live my dream?
As I take a right to this obscure scene
<chorus>
Song blares
Man relates
As the tears fall down my face
As the tears fall down my face
Comments
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Nice song Kayla, one of your better ones, lyrics and story are relatable. Nice metaphor of the car journey to the emotions felt.
You should consider experimenting, putting your words to music using Ai like Suno, may give you and others another dimension to your lyrics. There is a good free package to try it out.
Well done.
Sid
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I like the storm metaphor. I think that works well. There's a lot more structure in this one, and I like to see that. I think it helps. I can imagine this being set to music much more easily.
I didn't really understand the chorus. The "song blares, man relates" part. Is the man relating to the song? How is that connected to your distress? Is he relating to that and not to you? If you're looking to communicate something more clearly to your listener that could be something to work on. But wait and get some more feedback first - could be just me!
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A little short on words; I found out May 8th that on May 7th one of my childhood friends passed away; less than 2 weeks before that I found out one of ex boyfriends passed away;
It's alot to process, alot of emotion, and alot of memory's coming back.
I was driving and there was a huge dark cloud in front of me and I was listening to Gary Jules Mad World and I felt he could relate to what I was feeling at that very moment.
When I was driving, I was taken on the imagery and thinking those lyrics I thought in my head and said, whoa this could be a hit sing. I got to where I was going and wrote after the first 3 lines of the chorus, the rest within 3 to 5 minutes later.2 -
Yeah, that's a lot coming at once. I hope turning it into song helped you to cope with it, at least a little.
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Kayla, I've taken the liberty of suggesting some changes here. I hope that doesn't upset you. Use it or lose it as you see fit. Not suggesting this is the "right" way to do it, just how I would modify it to make things clearer for the listener. But this is your song, and you may prefer it just as it spilled out of you to capture that authenticity.
<1st verse>
I drive into the storm
It's dark and cloudy
Like my mind
How I feel about life
How i feel about life
<chorus>
Song blares out Mad World
I can so relate
As the tears fall down my face
As the tears fall down my face
<2nd verse>
Friends and lovers gone today
Twists and turns in the road,
Change the song
Oh please change the song
<chorus>
Song blares out Mad World
I can so relate
As the tears fall down my face
As the tears fall down my face
<bridge>
When can I live my dream?
As I take a right to this obscure scene
<chorus>
Song blares out Mad World
I can so relate
As the tears fall down my face
As the tears fall down my face
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it makes sense now , good job
Here ya go , I got a Suno v5 account . Give ya a idea how it could sound
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Wow, thank you so much, that is super super cool. Thanks for taking the time1
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Such a beautiful voice Kayla, with that kind of vocal talent and writing depth you could be a phenom in this world of boring song writers stuff...keep on with it girl.
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Cool lyrics Kala. Good meter, and the lyrics flow very well. You need another line in the 2nd verse. Maybe," you always say I'm the one that's wrong " or something like that. Owen has some good points.
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@Kayla813 Yes indeed, one of your very best! And looking over Owen's suggestions, I agree because "Man can relate" struck me funny as well. And so sorry for your losses. My deepest condolences.
Renee 💌
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