My pal sal
lyrics me - music sonu.
Ok. I'm going to enter these lyrics into a contest. I wrote them for a specific score.
Just curious if my theory will pan out or not.
how would rate these based on a score from 1 - 10.
https://suno.com/song/8abb63f7-638e-48a5-a749-07e6ad3fa60b?sh=OFSh22guWfnerDrr
[Verse 1]
My pal sal is funny little guy
Whose third eye's aloft in the sky
His melting hands of time can fly
And subside in a primordial divine
[Verse 2]
My pal sal is curious little creature
Sad man, with oddly distorted features
Spending days leering behind bleachers
And nights bathed in neon's flowing wine
[Verse 3]
My pal sal's brain is quite humongous
Fleeting from captivity, running from us
Many things to do, mustn't miss the bus
To a place where this and that intertwine
[Verse 4]
My pal sal's life is of marshmallow delight
Frolicking gayfully in pillows of white
Mind gone, caring less of wrongs and rights
Carefully he balances on a very thin line
[Verse 5]
My pal sal's world changed one sunny day
I think in either in march, april or may
He met a gal, and gleefully yelled, hurray!
Locked in an eternal embraced they dined
[Outro]
My pal sal' has since vanished from my yard
He left a dead spot of grass and this card
Saying for me not take his leaving so hard
And that he'll find the time to drop a line
Comments
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ha ha ha very entertaining Bill
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@ElvisNash -thanks, I need a score.. what would you score this?
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10 on its unigue way . Who would think about this besides you ? No one
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Actually i got the idea from the song the gnome by pink floyd. can't match syd's mind :)
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ha ha ha , you give him a run for the money man
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syd was on lsd, so he had help :)
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Everybody was on LSD back then. Most songs don't make sense , they were on drugs . Yours makes sense . I wanna thank God and cocaine for this song back then . We slept in the studio and did lines , thanks again
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Has a curious childlike quality to it, though the language is clearly aimed at adults, as is the musical style you've chosen for it.
Some lovely phrases like: neon's flowing wine
And I like the rhyming structure. Hard to keep that going over 6 verses and make it feel natural.
Don't know what qualities the contest is looking for, but my personal rating would be around 7.5. I think it's well crafted, but at the end of it, it wasn't stuck in my head, nor something I would rush to share.
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Basing the score on the lyrics alone, I would give a 7. I liked the rhyming structure aaab, aaab, it worked well and kept the interest level up. The content is a bit aqueous, moving as it does between guy and creature, nothing unusual there for those familiar with your work Bill. Maybe confusing for those new to your work. Innovative and appealing would be my summary, targetted as it is to a niche audience is likely to elicit lower scores from the non-bohemians.
If I include the music, which I loved, the score for the whole song would be 9 easily.
Hope it helps and let us know how you got on, good luck!
Sid
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@RainyDayMan , @sidshovel _ thanks for the comments and scores. welp. I was going for mildly absurd. I had the idea to write a song silly and nonsensical to see if could get a low score.. in my head that made sense :)
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You don’t wanna know Bill
Ha ha ha
Just say No0 -
In the words of the OJays..
I love music
Any kind of music
I love music
Just as long as it's groovin'
Bill, your song made me laugh, made me smile, and I loved it! You are a professional on how you have mastered Suno to fit your lyrics. I love your work. It's a 10 for me!
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welp, it didn't make last, which is what I was hoping.. I did. a lot score were similar to sid's 7. two people did give me 3's, but most 6's and 7's.. I'll have to try harder next time to make it more gibberish :)
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@bhengen Didn't do too bad Bill, next to last, good effort, better luck next time. What you need with those over at the muse is a C.W. song where the guy who's gay, an agnostic, preferably any colour other than white, pro abortionist shoots a pastor, burns down a church, rides off till his horse dies after trampling his dog. Ends up in a LGBTQ+ bar which only serves soft drinks and doesn't allow line dancin', falls in love with a Mexican and wears his MAGA hat backwards.
Guarantee you'll come last!
Sid
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@sidshovel - so very true. :)
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Ha ha ha Sid0
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