Sunset Shakedown
Who you clearly are
is not always what another sees.
A dream out there too far,
who you always wanted to be
You know you shoulda known.
the answer was ready to fall silently
Even though your final plan was sown
everybody feels it down to the bone,
deceive yourself with a paper crown
ignore the bare teeth facing you
asking yourself who am I?
Trying to avoid a sunset shakedown. 3X
You’ve always known what you wanted to be
It’s easy building a life lying by the stream
But you chose the impossible,
you chose, you chose the impossible
you rode a life a long time or so it seems
our true self is always there to trust
When we get back up
from how we bleed.
Sunset shakedown (3x)
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I picture an elderly guy sitting on his porch rocking while strumming a dobro with his basset hound at his feet 😂 has that old timey feel to it. Nice guitar work0
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The lyrics feel like they carry a lot of weight, but I have to say I don't really follow them.
I get a sense of introspection, perhaps not being true to yourself, and towards the end of life being disappointed with how things have turned out.
"Sunset shakedown" is a lovely evocative phrase and title.
I like the music too. Nicely done.
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The big stand-out here is the music and that brilliant guitar work. I listen to the music and I hear Richie Havens.
I must echo RDM's comments re the lyrics, don't get me wrong, they're not bad, but when the music is as good as this, the words need to be memorable.
We write what we clearly feel and see in our minds but very often it gets lost in translation to others.
You've got a story and it's good, how best to tell it, is the goal.
Don't walk away from this, it's too good, build the story around the music.
Sid
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I understood it.. to me they lyrics are fine, but then 99.99% of what I write nobody gets so.... :)
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That’s a killer country hook
I’m not really getting the story , maybe back to the drawing board , but I get a feeling you could careless on Nashville
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there isn't a story per se in this, there's a jumbling of lines noisy, chaotic - disorganized. I wanted confusion and impossible questions. In place of story there is the narrator's succession of off-hand, mindless quirks
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Ok! Well I guess that's working then!
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its a killer hook RC
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Sounds like my mind on most days 😂
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