Queue Jumper
Probably goes on a minute to long
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Do people pray
If they don't believe ?
If that's the case
What are they
trying to achieve ?
when they get desperate
they turn to faith
can't rely on the human race
so they look to something
that they don't think is there
What about us
who get up dawn
seven days a week
stifling a yawn
You're a queue jumper
You're a queue jumper
I've been praying all of my life
now you're desperate you want something nice
get behind me
I've been waiting all day
Do people pray
If they don't believe ?
If that's the case
What are they
trying to achieve ?
Do people pray
If they don't believe ?
If that's the case
What are they
trying to achieve ?
I've been praying all of my life
now you're desperate you want something nice
You're a queue jumper
You're a queue jumper
You're a queue jumper
You're a queue jumper
I've been praying all of my life
now you're desperate you want something nice
I've been praying all of my life
now you're desperate you want something nice
I've been praying all of my life
now you're desperate you want something nice
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Couldn't upload the song
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You had me on the first 12 lines. Then you changed pronouns , What about us, It seems disjointed now . You got be carful on you me them on pronouns . I have no idea what a queue jumper is , if your using that , you need to lead to hook
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verb
BRITISH ENGLISH
- push into a queue in order to be served or dealt with before one's turn.
- take unfair precedence over others:
- "a system that allows patients to queue-jump ahead of others simply because of their ability to pay"
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Are you talking about a certain person , On You're ?
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No it's just an observation about people who pray when they don't normally have any regard for God when live is going smoothly 😀
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jumpshare.com/s/iT8xKQLLvzCB2GLqzCyQ
In case anybody missed the link
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Well you're pronouns are going sideways to me , Yes I hear it , Suno is competition to me to beat with live tracks . Just copy and paste it takes ya there , its a cool hook for sure
Sounds good
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Interesting idea to have a narrator paranoid about someone cutting the god queue - as if the salvation is going to run out before the narrator gets there. It could do with another verse or something, rather than just repeating so much at the end.
Nothing wrong with the pronouns, they make perfect sense.
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Interesting idea! It's certainly got a novelty factor to it, and "queue jumper" is a good hook.
Queue jumper is a common term in Australia.
I'm not sure logically it makes sense, cause why does one prayer supercede another? But hey this is songwriting! Sometimes it just has to sound good.
I'm a bit with Elvis on the pronouns. It's not that you can't work it out, but the switch from they to you feels a little bit jarring. Maybe you could start in 2nd person as well?
Do you pray
When you don't believe ?
If that's the case
What are you
trying to achieve ?
You can decide for yourself whether that works any better. It's a bit more direct and in your face though.
Regardless, I really enjoyed listening to that.
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@KatiesPRIDE Nicely done! Thought provoking and unique title/hook! I like what Owen has to say 'you' versus 'they'...hmmm. I'd like to hear it both ways. Now, for a listen..... lovely melody through and through.
Brave move,
Renee 💌
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It’s not that your paying session players for a resing which is $250.00 it’s Suno a penny a song , good luck on it , fix the pro nouns so it makes sense0
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