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Crystal Lynn wrote: Susan...thank you....really...I don't hear myself that way...and Mike really made me shine on this one.....but I think it's cool how we all help each other here....and can be honest.....all is good in TSF...;)


OK.....then here is a song just for Crystal....so new the pencil lead is still laying on the paper.  R&B Gospel style.  I hope it isn't too self-serving.  If anyone likes it I will move it to the lyrics section.  Let me know if you think this needs another verse or whatever...its really new.

You Make Me Shine
Copyright 2006 MG Frisbey

Well I used to pretend happiness
Was something you could buy
A bigger house with fancy car

And diamonds made me sigh

Then something changed
When you walked in
Right into my life
All it took were words from you
To really make me shine

(Chorus)
Now I'm singing everyday
With a smile they can't erase
You gave me all the joy I need
My fears have been replaced

Well something changed
When you walked in
Right into my life
All it took were words from you
To really make me shine

V2
I no longer want or really need
To speak to Mr. Blue
I lift my head and look above
And sing a song or two

Well something changed
When you walked in
Right into my life
All it took were words from you
To really make me shine

(Chorus)

V3
When I stand there in the sky
And we meet face to face
I'll remember happy times
Like when we first embraced

For now I live from day to day
Knowing things are fine
'Cause all it took were words from you
To really make me shine

(Chorus)

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Susan....I mean Lucy made me move these lyrics.:D

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Mike, I think it's great! Grammatically speaking though,I think the word  "were" might be more correct in the line-

{All it took was words from you}? I might be wrong...........:Angel:

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lol...Awesome lyrics if I don't mind saying so myself, for you, TSF-M. Sharwy boss, I'll try to keep the pressure down from now on...:D Now where's Crissy? Hmmm, my job is never done!!!!!!!!exit>>>>>>>>>>>>>

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miraclebaby wrote: Mike, I think it's great! Grammatically speaking though,I think the word  "were" might be more correct in the line-

{All it took was words from you}? I might be wrong...........:Angel:


Thank you, I changed that.  Like I said I just wrote them and didn't even spell chuck them. LOL

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It's awesome no matter what.

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The angels, and :P Lucy, are watching over you, T-M!!

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Thanks Debbie.  I just have a melody in my head right now and nothing really concrete--although some say I do have a hard head.

I don't know if I should write a third verse or not.  I probably will just because.

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Lucy, that's a comforting thought.  I wish they were watching over my bank account too.  LOL.

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TSF-Mike, I wouldn't touch your first statement with a 40 ft pole!!!lol

Now, down to business.....I would like a 3rd verse please...you dam good at this.

Money is like play dough....you finish the rest..;)

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Susan Jeffries wrote: TSF-Mike, I wouldn't touch your first statement with a 40 ft pole!!!lol

Now, down to business.....I would like a 3rd verse please...you dam good at this.

Money is like play dough....you finish the rest..;)


How about a 10 foot pole?

So you want fries with that?

For everything else there's Mastercard?

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Good answer, but I think you've a tad bit too much tea!!!! lol All in all, I rate your response a good 10...lolololol
You're beside yourself with wit, and no thank you to the fries....lobster works though, along with a 3rd verse, that is!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep your chin up about the play dough! ha ha


(I've been this way ever since you called me lucy) :cool:

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Third verse posted.  Let me know if it is OK.

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T-Mike.......wow, you really made this song shine. Love the 3rd verse you added! Think this is a beautiful song now, and with your talent, will be a great final product.I say Bravo *****. I wouldn't change a thing. I can feel the passion above all. Great job Mike!!!! Now, where's Crissy?
keep me posted on this one, I really love it, ok????

Suzie/Lucy ha ha


 

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Mike, I like the third verse. The ending brings it back to today.

However, if I may interject a thought.....The rhythm of verses are not what I have been able to "get". I know the melody makes the song too, but the beats per line are throwing my sence of balance off. I would like to hear how it would be sung , as the pauses sometimes make the rhythm work. I am just a control freak,and free verse is not my best road to travel. Good Luck.

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miraclebaby wrote: Mike, I like the third verse. The ending brings it back to today.

However, if I may interject a thought.....The rhythm of verses are not what I have been able to "get". I know the melody makes the song too, but the beats per line are throwing my sence of balance off. I would like to hear how it would be sung , as the pauses sometimes make the rhythm work. I am just a control freak,and free verse is not my best road to travel. Good Luck.

Debbie, this is pretty standard meter on this one.  If you can't get it, then try clapping your hands to a good, uptempo R&B Gospel beat and the words should flow pretty good.

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Susan Jeffries wrote: T-Mike.......wow, you really made this song shine. Love the 3rd verse you added! Think this is a beautiful song now, and with your talent, will be a great final product.I say Bravo *****. I wouldn't change a thing. I can feel the passion above all. Great job Mike!!!! Now, where's Crissy?
keep me posted on this one, I really love it, ok????

Suzie/Lucy ha ha 

Suzie......10-4.  T-Mike, good thing my name isn't Rex :D:D

I am waiting for Sissy (aka Crissy, aka Crystal)  Sissy said she needed to finish up some stuff before we can turn this one into a hit.

Now that we have all made her into a star, her rates are going to go up.

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SF-Mike, lol...I know that's right!!! She's quite a gal with a great voice. She will shine even brighter after this new song of yours is finished..;) I'd say she is singing something as we speak! Stardom is a hard thing to take sometimes......(Crissy you are too humble) :cool:

Mike, I'm just too lazy to put the full TSF in there, sounds robotic, I need to come up with a new name to call you for sure!!!! Men....pick pick pick!!!LOL

(BTW, I like the Mastercard coverup haha)

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Susan Jeffries wrote: SF-Mike, lol...I know that's right!!! She's quite a gal with a great voice. She will shine even brighter after this new song of yours is finished..;) I'd say she is singing something as we speak! Stardom is a hard thing to take sometimes......(Crissy you are too humble) :cool:

Mike, I'm just too lazy to put the full TSF in there, sounds robotic, I need to come up with a new name to call you for sure!!!! Men....pick pick pick!!!LOL

Well T-Mike is fine or Mikey or Michael (eh....that one my mom used to call me when I was in trou---ble)

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Susan Jeffries wrote: (BTW, I like the Mastercard coverup haha)


This editor is way cool, you can reply to a message and then go back and read it again and Voila! there is more new stuff magically in there!  LOL

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lol   rates??  If anything I'm still trying to pay off some debts.....to you, Sean, Mike M. and Big John.   And why in the hell would you want to work with me...you know I'm bad luck....look how long it took "When I Close My Eyes"  c'mon nowand it only turned out great because you finessed it with your gadgets..(no offense) I've got A LONG WAY to go before I'm a star....but it's my dream....and a dreamer keeps dreamin' ;) 

I am really honestly trying to find my own voice right now...what I want to really sing....and I'd like to concentrate more on the music part right now...learning how to get my own melodies on the guitar....it's a real struggle to find time....let alone keep balancing all the lyrics and songs people ask me to help them with....and while most times I say yes to a project...and it turns out great....others I feel pressured by, I hate to let anybody down...or even say no....but I really can't work on this one right now.  I have fooled around with it...and I like the flow..and the feel of it...but the hook leaves me dry...I think there is something bigger there...;)

But you guys work with it!!   There are so many more talented singers on here...that know how to use their voice.....me on the other hand....I'm just learning as I go...and most importantly...I've got freinds like you all that can understand I'm way behind trying to catch up fast....(there's a good line) lol   

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Just step on the bugs, right? lol, yes, you are magic Mikey!!! ha ha, I like that. Much better then stale old TSF-Mike!!! ;) Just giving you a hard time Big Kahuna

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Crystal Lynn wrote: lol   rates??  If anything I'm still trying to pay off some debts.....to you, Sean, Mike M. and Big John.   And why in the hell would you want to work with me...you know I'm bad luck....look how long it took "When I Close My Eyes"  c'mon nowand it only turned out great because you finessed it with your gadgets..(no offense) I've got A LONG WAY to go before I'm a star....but it's my dream....and a dreamer keeps dreamin' ;) 

I am really honestly trying to find my own voice right now...what I want to really sing....and I'd like to concentrate more on the music part right now...learning how to get my own melodies on the guitar....it's a real struggle to find time....let alone keep balancing all the lyrics and songs people ask me to help them with....and while most times I say yes to a project...and it turns out great....others I feel pressured by, I hate to let anybody down...or even say no....but I really can't work on this one right now.  I have fooled around with it...and I like the flow..and the feel of it...but the hook leaves me dry...I think there is something bigger there...;)

But you guys work with it!!   There are so many more talented singers on here...that know how to use their voice.....me on the other hand....I'm just learning as I go...and most importantly...I've got freinds like you all that can understand I'm way behind trying to catch up fast....(there's a good line) lol   

Sorry, I missed this post.  I'm trying to keep up.

Honestly, you are ultimately going to have to decide what is best for you and your family.  Me, I have already seen the writing on the wall and I believe others have too.  You don't need to find your voice, it's right there in front of you.  You just need to get into a studio and work with a voice coach to harness that great potential.  It wouldn't take you long.

Personally I believe you may be trying to go too many directions at once.  There is no need to worry about doing another song for me or paying me back for that matter.  Just do me a favor and use the talent God gave you and don't waste it.

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Crissy,
Mike is right you know!! Work your voice and all the other talents you were blessed with, at your pace...don't get all stressed out over catching up!! You have to keep it fun doll!!! :D

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Amen Mike!

Crystal, The same goes for me. The pleasure was all mine. If you feel the need to pay anyone back, when you hit it big, just remember us poor folks, and cut one of our songs, LOL

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You got it....;) 

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Wow Mike .... that was a way cool post, being so supportive of Crystal....(who will catch a break, it's just a matter of time) You guys are what make the world go 'round KUDOS all.
Marlene

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ME wrote: Wow Mike .... that was a way cool post, being so supportive of Crystal....(who will catch a break, it's just a matter of time) You guys are what make the world go 'round KUDOS all.
Marlene

Thanks Marlene.

So how's those Canada lyrics coming along?  I am going to try to get some sort of melody down for you this weekend to go with what you sent me....I hope.

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I didn't want you all to think I hadn't acknowledged all the kind and supportive words that Mike wrote....I sent him a direct e-mail to thank him.....so I apologize for not publically thanking him....I just didn't want you guys to see me cry....;)

Mike Frisbey and I have been freinds for over a year now....he helped me out with my first song....he offered me a great opportunity to sing on one of his songs...he and I have butted heads....and talked on the phone about the weather...lol   You have been a very dear freind to me Mike.....and because of you I have even met more amazing people....and extended my "songwriting" family...learning lessons from all of you at different times....some have been huge lessons...and one has changed my life....I know where I'm going.....I just need to figure out how to get there....but I know it's around the bend......lol   And the closer I get...the clearer it becomes I'm on my way....without all of your support and love....I'd still be singing in the shower....lol  

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OK, group Hug!! Now doesn;t that feel all warm & fuzzy?

Do you have a webcam in the shower? How the heck am I supposed to peek?

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lol of course!!  Doesn't everyone??  lol Just kidding....maybe I should edit that out...lol

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Great! now you took it out and now my post just makes me look like an old pervert.

Not that I need any help in that area!

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Crystal Lynn wrote: I didn't want you all to think I hadn't acknowledged all the kind and supportive words that Mike wrote....I sent him a direct e-mail to thank him.....so I apologize for not publically thanking him....I just didn't want you guys to see me cry....;)

Mike Frisbey and I have been freinds for over a year now....he helped me out with my first song....he offered me a great opportunity to sing on one of his songs...he and I have butted heads....and talked on the phone about the weather...lol   You have been a very dear freind to me Mike.....and because of you I have even met more amazing people....and extended my "songwriting" family...learning lessons from all of you at different times....some have been huge lessons...and one has changed my life....I know where I'm going.....I just need to figure out how to get there....but I know it's around the bend......lol   And the closer I get...the clearer it becomes I'm on my way....without all of your support and love....I'd still be singing in the shower....lol  

I can see clearly now, the rain is gone,
I can see all obstacles in my way
Gone are the dark clouds that had me blind
It’s gonna be a bright (bright), bright (bright)
Sun-Shiny day.

I think I can make it now, the pain is gone
All of the bad feelings have disappeared
Here is the rainbow I’ve been prayin' for
It’s gonna be a bright (bright), bright (bright)
Sun-Shiny day.

Look all around, there’s nothin' but blue skies
Look straight ahead, nothin' but blue skies

I can see clearly now, the rain is gone,
I can see all obstacles in my way
Gone are the dark clouds that had me blind
It’s gonna be a bright (bright), bright (bright)
Sun-Shiny day.

(I Can See Clearly Now --Johnny Nash)

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I'd love to be hearing that sitting on the beach drinking a cold one right now.....with some tall dark handsome man right now.....I love that song...

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Crystal Lynn wrote: I'd love to be hearing that sitting on the beach drinking a cold one right now.....with some tall dark handsome man right now.....I love that song...
Well, I'm not tall, dark or handsome and the only cold beverage I current have is an iced tea.  I guess that's a real mood killer eh?

75+ degrees here today with clear blue skies though.

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Crystal, I certainly never intended to imply anything other than how amazing it was to hear that you are on your way.... with a little help from a friend :D And how cool is that!

Mike- at the end of one wicked week I have not had the chance- but I shall ~early this week ~get my pen and paper and sit out back after work. :Flame This:
I absolutely love the intro .... I know I already said that ... but WOW!
Marlene


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