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While I listen to the voice of the blackbird
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 Posted: Mon May 16th, 2022 12:30 pm
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Mora Amaro La Loba
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Hola!!! I hope you are ok!
This song is a mix of tragedy and humor, it would be great it entertains you!!
Mora

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6nBSwuI1XzM


While I listen to the voice
of the blackbird
I look at yoiur face
wondering
why why why
it's impossible to change past

I think of a thousand things
no clear thought
stands out
from the crowd
that stirs stirs stirs
in my mind
screaming words
that cover each others

everything could be so simple
like the games of childs
but you
have made me grave
of your dreams
and mines

we are dead and alive
under layers of time
turned into stones
over our heads

while I listen to the voice
of the blackbird
singing singing singing
to the night
to the stars
that are still what they are
inertia overr inertia
like our life



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 Posted: Tue May 17th, 2022 11:18 pm
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Well, you know I'm a fan of your music Mora, and this is no exception. Great video too..as always! If you haven't done it already you really should release an album. Fabulous..I love this:)



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You have such talent Mora! That was wonderful.



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 Posted: Thu May 19th, 2022 11:00 am
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ChrisPrice wrote:
Well, you know I'm a fan of your music Mora, and this is no exception. Great video too..as always! If you haven't done it already you really should release an album. Fabulous..I love this:)

Wow!!! Thank you Chris, you make me feel so good!!

Mora



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 Posted: Thu May 19th, 2022 08:06 pm
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RainyDayMan wrote:
You have such talent Mora! That was wonderful.

Thank you so much!!!
Stay well
Mora



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 Posted: Sat May 21st, 2022 10:20 pm
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This put me in a trance as I listened. I really enjoyed the music and vocals. Cool video. I loved the dancing skeleton :)

Really cool song Mora!

This verse has some language questions:


everything could be so simple
like the games of childs >>- 'Children'
but you
have made me grave
of your dreams >>- 'of' sounds odd. Maybe I am reading it wrong though.
and mines >>- not need for the s at the end of mine.



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 Posted: Sun May 22nd, 2022 12:26 pm
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Andrea wrote:
This put me in a trance as I listened. I really enjoyed the music and vocals. Cool video. I loved the dancing skeleton :)

Really cool song Mora!

This verse has some language questions:


everything could be so simple
like the games of childs >>- 'Children'
but you
have made me grave
of your dreams >>- 'of' sounds odd. Maybe I am reading it wrong though.
and mines >>- not need for the s at the end of mine.


Hola Andrea
Thank you! I had a lot of fun making the vid!!
Regarding lyrics, I have to change "Childs" by "children" and " grave of" by "grace for"?



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