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Three Minute Vacation
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 Posted: Fri Jul 16th, 2021 07:55 pm
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Elvis Nash
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https://soundcloud.com/benkrahne/3-min-vacation-new-lyr-mix-1


V1:
Ridin’ into work, I’m hittin’ nothin’ but red lights
Prius cuts me off and I’m ready to fist fight
Cuz my hot black coffee’s burnin thru my jeans now
Thank God I got the radio to calm me down

CHORUS:
I take a 3-minute vacation when I hear me a Country song
Puts me right in a vibe and I’m good as gone
Summers at the lake starry nights above
Got my girl and a blanket on the tailgate of my truck
It’s a little bit of right when my day goes wrong
Hearing a country song I take a 3-minute vacation

V2:
"Walking downtown through construction zones"
People all around talkin' loud on their cell phones
It’s too much city for this back woods boy
I put my earbuds in to drown out the noise

CHORUS:

Last edited on Fri Jul 16th, 2021 08:08 pm by Elvis Nash

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 Posted: Sun Jul 18th, 2021 04:56 am
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Great chorus! Love that.

This feels like a paid demo, so I don't imagine you would want to change anything at this point, but I might start with V2 rather than V1, it feels like it sets the context better for mine.

It's a very polished production and certainly feels radio ready.

Good stuff.



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 Posted: Wed Jul 21st, 2021 03:31 pm
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Well his going to work v1 .......v2 walking downtown so seems to work ....thanks

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Yeah, I get that chronologically he's going to drive into work before he can walk around the city streets.

But this line feels like the most important part of the setup:
It’s too much city for this back woods boy
and it would be good to get to that quickly.

But as always, it's your song, and only you know what takes it towards what you want it to be. You've thought about it, so stick with your instinct!



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 Posted: Thu Jul 22nd, 2021 02:44 pm
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Send to Bobby producer for Kenny Chesney .... personally I dont see Kenny singing this ... but who knows

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 Posted: Sun Jul 25th, 2021 04:17 pm
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Hey Elvis,
This was a lot of fun! I hate Priuses. I took a taxi ride in one and wanted to puke. Downtown-big-city with a bunch of fools is not my idea of fun. Thank God for country music!

Great little song! Keep making music.

Charles



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 Posted: Tue Jul 27th, 2021 12:18 am
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Well we are a family of hybrid vehicles (save the planet and all), one being a Prius. But, I'll overlook the trash talk because your song took me on a joyride! I am not really a country music fan, but I enjoy a good song when I hear it.

I love the chorus, but really enjoyed it all around. Hope to hear it on the radio :)



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 Posted: Tue Aug 3rd, 2021 05:29 pm
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yeah we used Prius lol ..battery cars I guess we had volvo
But decided to go with 2021 cars
U mean Uber .............yeah I tried doing that for a week
Its bs ..........oh yeah you'll make 2k a week lol
Right they're full of it
Thanks

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 Posted: Sun Oct 10th, 2021 11:28 am
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Wow! Great song, killer chorus and a really good vocal
Regards
RCJ

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