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 Posted: Thu Jun 10th, 2021 12:16 am
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I've been getting back to the core of who I am in recent months. With that journey through self-examination has been a return to Christian music. I sat down recently and decided I wanted to see if I could write an "album's worth" of worship songs out of the Book of Psalms. This was the first result.

(Just for reference, I use the ESV and TPT in my personal Bible study time, so these lyrics come from those translations)

The Shadow of Your Wings
Jacob West ©2021

I have a place
Of refuge from the storm
When I can't take anymore
Your love finds me

Pre Chorus:
When destruction's all around me
And despair is all that I see
God, I'll give you my praise

Chorus:
Here in the shadow of your wings
I find joy
My heart finds peace
And my soul sings
Here in the shadow of your wings

God you have a plan
And a purpose for my life
So on my knees I cry
Show me your glory

REPEAT PRE-CHORUS
REPEAT CHORUS

Your steadfast love
Keeps my soul secure
Everyday I'll praise you more
Oh God be exalted

REPEAT PRE-CHORUS
REPEAT CHORUS

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Has a very gentle, peaceful feeling to it.



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Wow Jacob, this gave me chills. It is beautiful! So many wonderful lines. It has a strong heartfelt feel. So good.

I have some thoughts, but they may not fit as you would like. Feel free to use or lose, whichever is best.

I have a place
Of refuge from the storm
When I can't take anymore
Your love finds me >>- He is already the place, so maybe something like 'It is in Your love'

Pre Chorus:
When destruction's all around me
And despair is all that I see >>- could par out 'that'
God, I'll give you my praise >>- This is the line I may be missing some meaning. It seems odd to me to sing praise when this is happening. Maybe that is the point? I was thinking something like 'you raise me up'

Chorus:
Here in the shadow of your wings
I find joy
My heart finds peace
And my soul sings
Here in the shadow of your wings >>- I love the chorus, it's beautiful!

God you have a plan
And a purpose for my life
So on my knees I cry
Show me your glory

REPEAT PRE-CHORUS
REPEAT CHORUS

Your steadfast love
Keeps my soul secure
Everyday I'll praise you more
Oh God be exalted

REPEAT PRE-CHORUS
REPEAT CHORUS



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Andrea wrote:
Wow Jacob, this gave me chills. It is beautiful! So many wonderful lines. It has a strong heartfelt feel. So good.

I have some thoughts, but they may not fit as you would like. Feel free to use or lose, whichever is best.

I have a place
Of refuge from the storm
When I can't take anymore
Your love finds me >>- He is already the place, so maybe something like 'It is in Your love'

Pre Chorus:
When destruction's all around me
And despair is all that I see >>- could par out 'that'
God, I'll give you my praise >>- This is the line I may be missing some meaning. It seems odd to me to sing praise when this is happening. Maybe that is the point? I was thinking something like 'you raise me up'

Thanks for the feedback, Andrea!

As far as the "Your love finds me" line, Psalm 57:3 says, "God will send out his steadfast love and his faithfulness." So I took the imagery of God dispatching love to find His people during their times of despair.

"And despair is all that I see"
When I sing it, there is no that. Apparently my fingers added that in when I was typing without my vocals knowing about it :D

Finally, the line about offering praise in the midst of everything comes from Psalm 57:7-9. I did consider using the phrase "Show me your glory" based on Psalm 57:11. That means it would read like this:

When destruction's all around me
And despair is all I see
Show me your glory

Do you think that would work better? I almost felt like it sounded like an A/A/A rhyme scheme which I've never used.

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When destruction's all around me
And despair is all that I see
God, I'll give you my praise

Since it is a PC, I think an AAA rhyme scheme is fine. But you do use "show me your glory" in V2 and I like it there.

I am thinking "your love finds me' might fit perfect in the PC.

When destruction's all around me >>- would drop the 'me' in this line
And despair is all that I see
Your love finds me >>- it's a good lead in to the chorus



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Andrea wrote:
When destruction's all around me
And despair is all that I see
God, I'll give you my praise

Since it is a PC, I think an AAA rhyme scheme is fine. But you do use "show me your glory" in V2 and I like it there.

I am thinking "your love finds me' might fit perfect in the PC.

When destruction's all around me >>- would drop the 'me' in this line
And despair is all that I see
Your love finds me >>- it's a good lead in to the chorus


Ooooo! I like dropping "me" from the first line of the pre-chorus! I hadn't even thought of that.

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I love the imagery and the use of adjectives! Very nice! Enjoyed reading.

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sapphire2685 wrote:
I love the imagery and the use of adjectives! Very nice! Enjoyed reading.

Thanks for the kind words!

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