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 Posted: Wed Jun 9th, 2021 01:10 am
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Kayla813
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Sir comes up to me
a week ago in an elevator
says i have two choices
it is quite clearer

give away my power
to a group that says they care
or give away my power
to the one i know that is really there

so i made my choice,
i made it known,
i did not know

that the choice made up on the phone

cos when you're tired
you don't think right
cos when you're wired
you do anything
but give up the fight

so sir showed up around 1 or 2 last night
gave me hope and inspiration
that it might turn out just right



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We can take the heat,
because we are on fire;
Nothing is HOTTER or BRIGHTER than that.
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 Posted: Fri Jun 11th, 2021 05:47 pm
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These are some nice lyrics! I love the plot and the concept, and the execution too. It is simple but effective. One thing that was a tad confusing (at least to me) was what the power you mentioned in the second section stood for. Maybe that could be clarified in future lyrics if you do decide to extend this song. Or, you could keep it vague for the listener to wonder about. It is really an intriguing topic though and some solid lyrics! (Also I'm not like super experienced at all so take my advice with a grain of salt lol)

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