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 Posted: Sun Jun 6th, 2021 06:46 am
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cmaja
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Would You Help Him Find His Home

Verse 1:
He knew where he was but he knew it ain’t his home
Somehow he’d forgotten, somehow he was alone
He said that he’d lost his way just a few years back
He said something happened and his memory ain’t intact

Chorus:
It was a strange predicament
But I heard of this before
It’s like he lost his heart, turned into an unknown
Like life in his past seems like what he’d dreamt
Leaving an intense longing crying in his soul
So I simply ask, would you help him find his home

Verse 2:
He recalls some old oak trees gathered ‘round a stream
A wood house on a rise, he knew it weren’t a dream
A dark haired, slender girl with deep love in her eyes
But there’s something in the mirror that he don’t recognize

Chorus:
So it’s a strange predicament
But I heard of this before
It’s like he lost his heart, turned into an unknown
Like life in his past seems like what he’d dreamt
Leaving an intense longing crying in his soul
So I ask again, would you help him find his home

Bridge:
The city peaks are steel and glass
The ground’s made of concrete
But he remembers hills and grass
And home folk kind and sweet
Somewhere shadowed in his past
His life is complete

Chorus:
Though it’s a strange predicament
And I heard of this before
It’s like he lost his heart, turned into an unknown
Like life in his past seems like what he’d dreamt
Leaving an intense longing crying in his soul
So I ask again, would you help him find his home

Coda:
But he knows his past is lost unlike the likes of us
We stumble through our lives assuming we clearly know
But home’s the dream of love that’s deep inside our soul
So when we help him find his home, it also helps us grow

© 2021 Charles M Anderson



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Charles, I think this is well done for the message you want to give. It's moralistic, and that's going to put some people off, but it's likely meant to be direct and somewhat confronting. Especially the coda.

You use "like" a few times in the chorus, so you might look at that unless you're deliberately repeating it.

"Leaving an intense longing crying in his soul"
The rhythm of that line feels different from the rest.
Are you looking to emphasize that with a different melody on that line? Very poignant line.

My favorite part is:
It was a strange predicament
But I heard of this before
It’s like he lost his heart, turned into an unknown

good that's in the chorus and will repeat.

It definitely conveys lost and lonely.



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RainyDayMan wrote:
Charles, I think this is well done for the message you want to give. It's moralistic, and that's going to put some people off, but it's likely meant to be direct and somewhat confronting. Especially the coda.

You use "like" a few times in the chorus, so you might look at that unless you're deliberately repeating it.

"Leaving an intense longing crying in his soul"
The rhythm of that line feels different from the rest.
Are you looking to emphasize that with a different melody on that line? Very poignant line.

My favorite part is:
It was a strange predicament
But I heard of this before
It’s like he lost his heart, turned into an unknown

good that's in the chorus and will repeat.

It definitely conveys lost and lonely.


Thank you for your positive review and comments. This was based on a movie where these two gentlemen helped a lost soul find his home.

The only moral argument portrayed is doing one’s best to help his fellow man. Those that are put off by this may need help someday. May God assist them in their time of need. And who among us is not lost and in need of God’s help?

"Leaving an intense longing crying in his soul", doesn’t rhyme with the second line to make it stand out a bit. It’s important to feel for those, like some l’ve know, who, for some reason —not of their fault, are missing a whole portion of their life. It’s heartbreaking.

I appreciate your checking it out.

Charles

Last edited on Tue Jun 15th, 2021 02:22 am by cmaja



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I think the song implies more than just helping a stranger.

But home’s the dream of love that’s deep inside our soul
So when we help him find his home, it also helps us grow


to me those lines imply loving a stranger and that's a harder ask than just helping one.



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RainyDayMan wrote:
I think the song implies more than just helping a stranger.

But home’s the dream of love that’s deep inside our soul
So when we help him find his home, it also helps us grow


to me those lines imply loving a stranger and that's a harder ask than just helping one.


Yes, Owen, and I’ve never met a stranger stranger than me. And the older I get the closer I get to home, I pray. Your right about being more —the movie/lyric is about a spiritual journey.

Charles



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Another beautiful story I can really relate to! Once when I was young- there was this old man in a pickup that ended up in our small town lost- he was scared and confused. The local police chief who is my friend ran his tag and found that he was from Clovis New Mexico- called his family and the old man had drove a few blocks to the store- got lost and ended up 2 states away in my town in Oklahoma!

We got in touch with his kids and got an address- I got in his truck and drove him home and his kids bought my bus ticket back ( maybe 35 years ago)

The entire drive this old man was totally confused and frightened- he kept saying "oh know- this isnt right" to the point I wanted to scream

After 5 hours and two blocks from his home his face lit up in a smile- He slapped his knee and said "hot damn this is it!"

It was really a sad drive and an uplifting experience taking him home back then!

Your lyrics brought that forgotten memory back to my mind- thank you for sharing it!

PS- Ive been away with work and trying to keep the lights on each week- I am hoping to get back to the forum again when winter gets here and Im "cooped up" got lots of stuff Id also like feedback on- miss all you folks!



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 Posted: Fri Jun 18th, 2021 07:39 am
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derrickhand300 wrote:
Another beautiful story I can really relate to! Once when I was young- there was this old man in a pickup that ended up in our small town lost- he was scared and confused. The local police chief who is my friend ran his tag and found that he was from Clovis New Mexico- called his family and the old man had drove a few blocks to the store- got lost and ended up 2 states away in my town in Oklahoma!

We got in touch with his kids and got an address- I got in his truck and drove him home and his kids bought my bus ticket back ( maybe 35 years ago)

The entire drive this old man was totally confused and frightened- he kept saying "oh know- this isnt right" to the point I wanted to scream

After 5 hours and two blocks from his home his face lit up in a smile- He slapped his knee and said "hot damn this is it!"

It was really a sad drive and an uplifting experience taking him home back then!

Your lyrics brought that forgotten memory back to my mind- thank you for sharing it!

PS- Ive been away with work and trying to keep the lights on each week- I am hoping to get back to the forum again when winter gets here and Im "cooped up" got lots of stuff Id also like feedback on- miss all you folks!


I appreciate you checking out my lyric, Derrick. Interesting story.

This lyric was based on a movie. But when I taught HS, we had a student who witnessed the murder of her parents when she was ten and, as a result, subconsciously block out all memories of the event and everything that happened in her childhood before the event. An absolute sweetheart but totally lost from her life with her parents. She lived with foster parents in our town in WA state and the event happened in the Midwest. She had to make up what her life was about before she was ten. The story of her life before ten kept changing until she realized she was lost and had no idea what happened to her or where her home really was. The plan was to tell her when she was 18. I never found out what happened to her since she left our school before her 18 birthday. What a sad tale…

I glad your story turned out positive.

Charles

Last edited on Fri Jun 18th, 2021 07:41 am by cmaja



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