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If Only They Brewed Up Love
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 Posted: Fri Sep 25th, 2020 06:32 am
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M.P. Dudash
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Been drinking since fifteen
Now I’m 45
Sometimes think it’s a wonder
That I’m still alive

I’ve seen my share of heartache
Hangovers too
There’s no use denying
They were both caused by you

If only they brewed up love
I could pick my own poison
See what she’s made of
Find a natural beauty
Who gets me hopped up
If only they brewed up love

I could try out another
Bring her home for a night
If she’s too hot to handle
I can put her on ice

I’ll bring her home just in case
Or only because
I’m craving the feelings
I can’t get rid of

If only they brewed up love
I could pick my own poison
See what she’s made of
Find a natural beauty
Who gets me hopped up
If only they brewed up love

When she touches my lips
I’d get my fix
If only they brewed up love

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 Posted: Sun Sep 27th, 2020 07:23 am
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My fav lines:
I’ve seen my share of heartache
Hangovers too
There’s no use denying
They were both caused by you


You might try:
If only they brewed up love > If they only brewed up love
depending on how you want the rhythm to go there.

"Trying out another" feels a little cold to me, but that could just be me!



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 Posted: Sun Sep 27th, 2020 12:21 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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Thanks for looking Owen. This was just kind of an off the wall idea I thought I’d write about. Not really sure it works in the first place but I do appreciate the suggestions.



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 Posted: Sun Sep 27th, 2020 11:04 pm
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M.P., I think this is fun. My favorite part is the chorus.

I think these last 2 verses are the weaker parts.

I could try out another >>- maybe taste me another
Bring her home for a night
If she’s too hot to handle >- hot doesn't work for beer, at least at the point when you drink it. I thought maybe spicy
I can put her on ice - If you changed the line above somehow different, then there are many words that rhyme with night.

I’ll bring her home just in case
Or only because
I’m craving the feelings
I can’t get rid of >>- personally this verse just falls short for me.

I think this is worth working on.



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 Posted: Thu Oct 1st, 2020 03:28 pm
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I think this could work. I would like to hear it sung. Along with the other suggestions, it may be me, "I could pick my own poison" seems off kilter.

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