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 Posted: Mon Feb 17th, 2020 05:32 am
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Title: Empty Words And Empty Hearts (WIP)
Lyrics Copyright © 2019 & 2020 Joe Givens

{Verse 1}

Empty words and empty hearts go together 11
That's why I'm layin' here writin' you a letter 13
In empty hearts good feelings seem to fade away 12
Though it's something I don't really wanna say 11

Empty words really mean nothin' to me. 10
Little lyin' thangs that bring such misery
Causin broken' hearts to grow empty inside
Is somethin' that you just can't deny


{To Chorus:}

{Instrumental Bridge}

{Verse 2}

Seems like ev'rything's been comin' up empty 11
Fo' me the day ya left and broke my heart, oh yeah 13
It's time to find another lover.. uh huh 12
Now it's time to make a brand new start. I said
11

{Chorus}

With empty words and empty hearts
I shoulda known right from the start
It was never gonna be
The same for you an' me

Empty words from empty hearts
Is what tore our love apart

{END}

Last edited on Tue Apr 27th, 2021 04:12 am by SongWriterJoe



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 02:23 am
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Well there's got to be a chorus there using those "empty words and empty hearts". It's just too good to pass up!

Currently, you've got the singer writing the letter, but there is an option to turn that around if you wanted along the lines of:
your empty words broke my heart
Now it's empty ....

Another line that occurs:
One and one make nothing but a broken heart

Worth pursuing!



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 03:11 am
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Me likie.. See what I can do with next verse or chorus.



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 12:16 pm
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Nice write Joe. I was going to suggest changing the verses up a bit. Combining lines 3 and 4 of v1 and going from there. Since you are going to do a rewrite I’ll wait.



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 12:21 pm
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Empty words and empty hearts go together 11
That's why I'm layin' here a-writin' you this letter 13
Empty hearts may fade away, and though I really hate to say 15
Empty words and empty hearts go together 11


Or Ch idea?
Empty words and empty hearts go together
They’ve taken on the headwinds and the weather
To the detriment of men, standing tall thru thick and thin
Empty words and empty hearts go together

Last edited on Tue Feb 18th, 2020 12:37 pm by M.P. Dudash



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 06:01 pm
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Part of this looks interesting. Let me cogitate on that weather line awhile.

Last edited on Tue Feb 18th, 2020 08:36 pm by SongWriterJoe



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 09:34 pm
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Hey Joe, I like this. These lines are great -Empty words and empty hearts.

I am digging the chorus, but will offer a one word suggestion:

"Those empty words and empty hearts"
Those empty words FROM empty hearts



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 10:12 pm
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@Andrea With apology to Mickey D's.. I'm lovin'it! Btw, I like that other rewrite and will be contacting you soon concerning the co-writing.

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 Posted: Wed Feb 19th, 2020 03:59 pm
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Hey Joe, Awesome on both accounts. Enjoy!



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