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Valentine’s Day is suppose to celebrate love and lovers, but I can’t help myself from using it to write a broken-hearted lyric. Sorry! CMA

My Blue Valentine
_______________Verse/Chorus

Verse 1:
Oh, my blue Valentine
Your heart has been broken again
He has left you for good this time
Will you find a way out of the rain
Will you finally see the sunshine

Chorus:
Oh, my blue Valentine
Forget the love that left you behind
The thoughts in your head
The ache in your heart
And urge yourself to make a new start
To feel all the love
To see all the signs
To open your heart to a new Valentine

Verse 2:
Oh, my blue Valentine
Your life has been turned on its head
He left you to find someone new
You need to find a new love instead
Of defying what you know is true

Chorus:
Oh, my blue Valentine
Forget the love that left you behind
The thoughts in your head
The ache in your heart
And urge yourself to make a new start
To feel all the love
To see all the signs
To open your heart to a new Valentine

Bridge:
How long will you let your heart be forsaken
It seems you’ve given more than you’ve taken
But love’s looking at you if you’d just awaken

Chorus:
Oh, my blue Valentine
Forget the love that left you behind
The thoughts in your head
The ache in your heart
And urge yourself to make a new start
To feel all the love
To see all the signs
To open your heart to a new Valentine

Post Chorus:
To open your heart to a new Valentine
Open your heart to a new Valentine

© 2020 Charles M Anderson

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I just heard on the radio that Valentine's Day is the #1 day of the year people file for divorce. That is a crappy stat! Valentine's day is a good day to find a new way to love.

First, I like the title. I like the idea of letting the hurt go and moving on.

Here are a couple thoughts to use or lose:

Just an idea here:
V1 Find your way out of the blinding rain
past the clouds that obscure the sunshine

In the chorus, the use of ache in the heart is common. Feels weak. I love the end line in the chorus - my favorite!

Alternative V2:

Stop replaying the scene in your head/Stop reciting the blame in your head
He has left you for somebody new
allow yourself to move forward instead
find someone who is honest and true

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I like this Charles. It's one where I can almost hear the music playing, and I always think that's a good sign.

It's tender and caring, with a ray of hope as well as being sad.

There are certainly a lot of people who get sad on Valentine's Day comparing their current situation against their dreams.

Hope you get it set to music, I'd like to hear it.

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Thanks RD Man... I honor you review and comments.

And Andrea, thanks for you fine review. I can’t get myself to make any changes yet, even after reviewing your suggestions numerous times.

Charles


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