The Songwriters' Forum - by Songwriters, for Songwriters Home 

Welcome to The Songwriters' Forum - by Songwriters, for Songwriters!
Please log on to view our discussion forum in its entirety.

Killing time
 Moderated by: Troy33, RainyDayMan, HankTheTank
New Topic Reply Printer Friendly
 Rate Topic 
AuthorPost
 Posted: Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 11:24 am
  PMQuoteReply
1st Post
Seamus2
Member
 

Joined: Mon Jul 22nd, 2019
Location:  
Posts: 114
Favorite Artist: 
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
He sits in folsolm prison
just waiting to die
looks out from his window
sees only walls and sky

thoughts turn to wasted life
if he could have another try
wasting away his life
watching days go by

He sits in folsolm prison
just waiting to die
looks out from his window
sees only walls and sky

thinks about his younger life
the chances that he had
but he took the fast road
and everything turned bad

He sits in folsolm prison
just waiting to die
looks out from his window
sees only walls and sky

he dreams his dreams of yesterday
before things went awry
now he's left with thoughts of dread
as he waits here to die

what a fool he thought himself
all the good times that he'd had
before he took that wrong road
and everything turned bad

He sits in folsolm prison
just waiting to die
looks out from his window
sees only walls and sky

CopyrightAlanEvans23122019

Back To Top 


 Posted: Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 07:36 pm
  PMQuoteReply
2nd Post
RainyDayMan
TSF Administrator


Joined: Thu May 17th, 2007
Location: Stratford, Australia
Posts: 7046
Favorite Artist: James Taylor, Cat Stevens, Joni Mitchell
I am a: Songwriter/Musician
Status: 
Online
That's a bleak one! It definitely has atmosphere and emotion. It reads very smoothly throughout, no hiccups there.

I like the double meaning in your title.

I can imagine this done in a blues style too.



____________________
https://soundcloud.com/RainyDayMan/tracks
https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=708281
Back To Top


 Posted: Sun Dec 29th, 2019 07:40 am
  PMQuoteReply
3rd Post
cmaja
Member


Joined: Fri Mar 22nd, 2019
Location: Kennewick, Washington USA
Posts: 1234
Favorite Artist: Eagles, Linda Ronstadt, Keith Urban, Billie Holiday, Metallica, Steely Dan
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
How sad and miserable! But it’d make a good country song. He should’ve reflected on his own life before taking someone else’s. Nice job!

Charles



____________________
All songs are from God. Those that are not, aren’t songs at all.
Back To Top 


 Posted: Sun Dec 29th, 2019 02:39 pm
  PMQuoteReply
4th Post
Seamus2
Member
 

Joined: Mon Jul 22nd, 2019
Location:  
Posts: 114
Favorite Artist: 
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
Thanks, Owen.

Back To Top


 Posted: Mon Dec 30th, 2019 05:35 pm
  PMQuoteReply
5th Post
M.P. Dudash
Contributor


Joined: Mon Apr 24th, 2017
Location: Ohio USA
Posts: 1348
Favorite Artist: George Jones, Coe, Twitty, Paycheck, Gosdin, Daryle Singletary
I am a: Other
Status: 
Offline
Good one Alan!



____________________
Takamine GN71CE Sunburst
Marlen Sd-10(Supposedly used on a Byrds recording)
Self teaching in progress

BMI IPI#1080090395
Back To Top 


 Posted: Tue Dec 31st, 2019 07:19 pm
  PMQuoteReply
6th Post
Seamus2
Member
 

Joined: Mon Jul 22nd, 2019
Location:  
Posts: 114
Favorite Artist: 
I am a: Songwriter
Status: 
Offline
Happy new year to you all.

Back To Top


Current time is 05:40 am

Top



UltraBB 1.172 Copyright © 2007-2016 Data 1 Systems
Page processed in 0.1539 seconds (10% database + 90% PHP). 26 queries executed.