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 Posted: Wed Dec 11th, 2019 07:15 pm
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We pass in lifes corridors
we meet up at the door
I might as well be invisible
You don't see me anymore

You go to work everyday
mostly without a word
my soul is crying deep within
I need to be heard

it's like we live separately
not how it should be
took our vows made promises
it looks like you broke free

we pass in lifes corridors
we meet up at the door
I might as well be invisible
You don't see me anymore

we've lost our way somehow
we hardly speak anymore
it's like you've fallen out of love
of your feelings I'm not sure

we pass in lifes corridors
we meet up at the door
I might as well be invisible
You don't see me anymore

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 Posted: Wed Dec 11th, 2019 08:15 pm
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Alan, this is short, bittersweet and beautiful. I love it! Simplicity like this is hard to come by. Outstanding!

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 Posted: Thu Dec 12th, 2019 11:39 am
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Thanks for your comments friend, it's much appreciated

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 Posted: Thu Dec 12th, 2019 09:55 pm
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Really strong chorus Alan. Very poignant.



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 Posted: Sun Dec 15th, 2019 10:20 pm
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Excellent alliteration. One of your better ones



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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 06:36 am
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Nice work Alan. I think if you changed life’s corridors to the hallway it would hit home a bit more. Take it or leave it, just my 2cents. Overall good work, like the others said!



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 Posted: Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 08:44 am
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Thanks, Owen.

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