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 Posted: Wed Mar 7th, 2018 10:12 pm
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Looking for some reaction.  Besides the song itself, would appreciate feedback on how it sounds to you from top to bottom.  Thanks!

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EXILE BLUES

All he ever wanted was to be free
Follow his own road, but that was not to be
They drove him down hard from Jerusalem to Rome
Drove him down for religion, drove him down for gold

Out of the ghetto, into the fire
Up on the mountain in the dark of night
Into the forest and over the hills
Out in the desert trying not to be killed

Is it any wonder, any wonder at all
That he stands alone like an old stone wall

If you know his story, you wonder how
He has survived up to now
Hunted and hiding from town to town
Staying alive underground

His enemies are many, few are his friends
What he is thinking they can only guess
He may be hoping for peace in his time
But he already knows they'll never take him alive

Is it any wonder, any wonder at all
That he stands alone like an old stone wall

So many years have come and gone
Still he is waiting for his time to come
Still he is hated for who he is
Still he remembers what they done to him

Is it any wonder, any wonder at all
That he stands alone like an old stone wall

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*** man only true life playing here, nice one and :cool:

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 Posted: Thu Mar 8th, 2018 11:39 am
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Janke, is this song about a specific person? If so, I can not figure out who it is. Please tell us!:shock:



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Wonderful sound! I like the fast bass, the rhythm guitar acting like a drone, the atmospheric picking and the sparse bass drum hits. The vocal echos work too. It's a great mix.

Not so sure about the opening. I would probably choose to start at around the 11 sec mark with that first guitar note.

I was hoping for a guitar solo somewhere in there though!



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Nice production, I read this several times before listening, (lost my headphones) and really like the Lyrics. I was waiting for a guitar solo as well. I'm thinking clean electric with a hint of flange.
I was thinking the break between the verse and 'is it any wonder' is just a little long, but it's not worth redoing.
Nice lyrics, cool groove, I'd crank it in the car.



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Marty, my wife said the same thing. 'Can't understand what/who it's about!' LOL. I never thought it was so cryptic myself. I tried to pepper it with all kinds of clues. To my thinking, there's only one group of people whose history of persecution is so profound.

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Thanks all for comments. Helpful!

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OH! Yes dear Janke! God's own chosen people, the Jews! I agree, and may God be with them now in Israel. The Bible does say that in the future they will clearly see that Christ Jesus is truly their Messiah, the blessed Son of the living God. Amen :)



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Amen, Marty.

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You again?!?

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JAPOV, Owen and I will delete these spam posts. I am requesting that you please do not not respond to them because I do not want to delete your post. Thank you



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Andrea wrote:
JAPOV, Owen and I will delete these spam posts. I am requesting that you please do not not respond to them because I do not want to delete your post. Thank you

Lol... I don't follow this thread. Feel free to delete my posts as well :)



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JAPOV, Owen and I will delete these spam posts. I am requesting that you please do not not respond to them because I do not want to delete your post. Thank you

Lol... I don't follow this thread. Feel free to delete my posts as well :)


You got me! When I saw you responded on this post, I was whining to myself. Very funny!!!!



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Sorry but I did not reach to listen to our track, it seams non available !!!
But I liked the lyrics and this line is wonderful
"...That he stands alone like an old stone wall"

Very heavy story

Stay safe!

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