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 Posted: Thu Sep 8th, 2011 02:05 pm
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Janke



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John, thanks for the reply. My conundrum continues to be the conflict with 'fall from grace' and 'end it now.' For me, if I had fallen from grace, I would not want to end it until I was reconciled. Know what I mean? So I would suggest a verse something like:

I fell from grace
On a winter's day
Down on my knees (avoid repetition of the word 'fell')
And began to pray

Lord I'm a fool
I know that now
I just kept praying
Please show me how

Just my thoughts for what it's worth. I surely like the feel of the piece from reading it.

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