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 Posted: Sun Dec 12th, 2010 09:11 am
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Gene Royce - Fenton

 

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The only problem i see here is you are not making the Title a large part of your chorus. The idea of using the cards is very good, but I would change the title to "Jesus Cancelled Out My Sins" followed by that line from your verse <,One Card at a time>that way it would fit your second chorus where the words change. But I would not use the same line  in your verse , that would be over doing the whole Hook Let every line point at your title Roy Very Good Work

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