|It sounds very much like a poem I heard by Josh Harris (I think it was also titled "The Room"). Great imagery. I have the same feelings about the bridge (both with "straight and narrow" and with the line about pride). Perhaps "I've entered through the narrow gate" or something to that effect. I'd definately change the "pride" line as it is one of the things God hates, but I think this could really be a good song. Please don't retire it! Take a break and then come back to it.
I did find the poem I was thinking of. Here is the link - http://www.joshharris.com/the_room_my_dream.php
Last edited on Sat Jul 10th, 2010 01:48 am by CalvinLuther