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 Posted: Mon Apr 12th, 2010 06:59 pm
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Chris Baker

Joined: Fri Apr 9th, 2010
Location: Plano, Texas USA
Posts: 198
Roy, I'm really digging the whole idea and metaphor in this tune. The only parts I'm having some problems with are the first two lines of the bridge. "Straight and narrow" just doesn't cut it imo -- perhaps something to underscore the signing notion or further the idea of the cards or redemption?

The next line, "My life is full of pride," kinda feels like you are writing for the rhyme. Isn't pride one of the deadly sins? It's often referred to as THE deadliest sin of them all. Maybe you have a different take on it?

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