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 Posted: Wed Dec 30th, 2009 02:03 am
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SundownSam



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I like it Clark! :D You did a very nice job on the rhyme scheme and it reads smoothly.  I think you got yourself a winner here! :)

Clark, if I may, I'd like to offer you a little tip in the way of one form of structure. It seems to tighten up the lyric a little and makes it more uniform and readable. Purely a suggestion though, as you may have something entirely different in mind. Just thought I'd toss it your way and see whatcha think? :)


Lyrics by Clark Ford © 2009

I followed you I let you lead
You were so sure And I believed
You spoke of love You touched my soul
You gave me hope You made me whole

You live in me
Your spirit's bright
I can go on
I'll be alright

And now it's time To say goodbye
I don't know how I don't know why
Is all hope gone? Is goodness dead?
What can I trust? Where should I head?

You live in me
Your spirit's bright
I can go on
I'll be alright

I close my eyes And see your light
Your spirit shines Into the night
I feel your love Deep in my heart
It's not the end It's just the start

You live in me
Your spirit's bright
I can go on
I'll be alright

You live in me
Your spirit's bright
I can go on
I'll be alright

You live in me...

Last edited on Wed Dec 30th, 2009 01:12 pm by SundownSam



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